deaths not painless

just a little thing i wrote against suicide p.s suicide sucks p.s.s[or whatever it is] ive made this and other poems into songs

even though you think the pain will end

a new pain will just begin

even though you'll cease to feel anything

the ones who loved you feel everything

even when your dead and gone

for all your friends its hard to pass on

 family will also weep

because your stuck in eternal sleep

suicide isnt quick and painless

its destructive and its outrageous

think twice befor you go and gambel your life

do you really wanna cause such missery

everyone will weap and greive

even though you wont feel anything

everyone will feel everything

Author's Note

i just wrote it you don't have to like it its my mind and i'm sticking with it

Reviews

[Michelle Lea]

I really like this poem. It made me think, you got your point across very well said!! It is true that death, whether suicide, you lose someone in a car accident, or even natural death, its a terrible event in the lives of their loved ones left behind! Thanks for sharing this piece with us, please keep writing.

[~angelalala~]

interesting. a powerful poem. i liked it. sadly, the world (depression, suicidal urges, self-destruction, personality disorders, mental disorders, pain, etc) is not nearly that simple. i agree, suicide is a horrible, selfish, stupid, pathetic, & weak thing to do to yourself, but for some it seems the only way to escape. (obviously from my namesake i know a little about it) a little preachy, but overall a unique strong poem & a good write.

[Kitty]

Having been one of those "suicidal" people, I can't say I totally agree with it not being a goos solution. I will however admit that this is a great poem!!!!

Nicely done.

Josie

[QuietPoet]

This was great. Its so true. Great write.

[Ravenskald]

"even though you'll cease to feel anything
the ones who loved you feel everything"

my favourite lines, reminds you things have a cost sometimes one that you don't pay yourself
Nice icon too btw ;)
~raven

[karmic]

I do like it, it seems you really made your point. This is a poem that really would make someone think. good job