Heart Garden

 I once gave a pretty rose the light from my heart,

Hoping that one day with her i might "part".

She was nurtured from seed and gave the room that she heeded,

And yet she broke from the garden i so desperately needed.

Her thorns and her vines ripped through my hearts carcass ,

but only to cleanse what lie away in its darkness.
 

Reviews

[Aimee Mahathy]

Pretty good, pretty good!
It flowed nicely and you used great imagery. My only suggestion would be watch your capitalization and spelling. Simple yes, but when I read "threw" (which should be "through") the flow was interrupted by my mind trying to re-spell it. If you corrected it, it'd be a little more amazing than it is.
Great job! Keep it up!