Lonliness

I was really lonley one day and I was kinda sad.

It feels like I'm alone.
I can hear the echo of my voice.
That wasn't even my choice.
The lonliness is burying me.
Almost as if something had grabbed my neck...
I look and see nothing.
I break into solem tears...
But, no one there to care.
I don't know what to do.
I can't feel the breath in me.
I tell myself to breathe.
I'm still alive.
I realize it's a dream...
But, when I wake up I'm still alone.
I swear I will avenge...
I go outside and still nothing.
I go into a frantic panic.
It feels like some horror movie...
I start to think hard.
Why is there nothing there?
I think I know everything.
I cry until I have no more.
Everything is dead.
I'm the only one still here.
The future is what I plan to fear.
I will be alone forever.

Reviews

[St.Jimmy]

very nicely written
it's really horrifying to realize the loneliness
and to accept this that you will be alone forever is even more
Good job!
~Aaradhya

[Kieran James McGovern]

Take some solace in the knowledge that most of us who write are along the same wavelength. Loneliness can make you wanna burst,. but diffuse it and think... I may be lonely, but I'm alive ;) Good job!

[mystic soul]

it is really horrifying to find your self in such situations where you want to be with someone but no one is there with you... the kind of anxiety, depression that you feel at that moment is very well shown here... good job:)

[Boris Jonathan Novak]

Wonderful work. This invokes the deep and isolated feeling we all can go through when we are feeling alone. It's like a deadening of the heart, and it's hard to get rid of that feeling when so many people may not understand what you're going through.