Intro

Just the intro to a story idea I have, feedback would be lovely

       "So, Rob, you sure you really wanna do this?"  Jordan said to Rob from the back seat of the SUV.
       "Yep," Rob said without taking his eyes off the road.
       "Oh man, this is gonna be awesome!  Do you think there are still guards?" David asked.
       "Dunno.  Either way, it'll be cool," Jordan grinned.
       "Wonder if they left any flying saucers behind," Kyle laughed, taking a sip of his coke.
       "Here we are, genle'men," Rob said, "Groom Lake."
       They all climbed out of the car.
       "So, this is all that's left?"  Jay stated, kicking a rock.
       "Well, now, they moved the location of Area 51.  Nobody knows where," Kyle said.
       "Oh, dude, look, the hangars are still here!" Jordan yelled excitedly, running over the large buildings.
       The others followed, not quite as quickly, "Whoa... it's like they all just left without any notice," he pressed his face against the window, "Everything is still set up, look," he turned back to his friends.
       "J-Jordan,"  Rob pointed at him shakely.
       "What?"  The others' mouth's were hanging open now.
       "Your-your eyes," David said.
       "What about them?" Jordan asked, confused.  He wiped his eye, "This is stupid-" he stopped short when he saw red blood on his hand.  He laughed nervously, wiping his eye again.  But there was more blood.
       "Um, guys," his nose started to run.  He wiped it with the back of his hand; more blood, "Guys!"  He tasted blood, "Oh my God, somebody, help me!!"  Blood was coming out his ears, his mouth.  He was holding his chest, "Oh God, this- help!"
       He fell to the ground. The other four started running.
       "Oh my God!  Oh my God, what just happened!?"  Jay said, breathing deeply.
       "I don't know, we have to call the cops," David pulled out his cell phone.
       "No!" Rob grabbed his hand.
       "Well why not!?"
       "If we call the cops, they'll know we were out here.  We can't do that," Rob said, "We have to leave him.  No one will find him."
       "Fine," they climbed in the car and sped off.

Author's Note

Just the intro to a story idea I have, feedback would be lovely

Reviews

[slemonade]

I don't know what your overall story idea is but, at this point, I think this intro is great. I really want to keep reading to find out what's going to happen and what exactly is going on with all that blood. There is one suggestion I would make and that is to add more description. There is too much dialogue for the amount of writing there is overall. Dialogue is great; people often prefer dialogue most of the time. However, you have way too much of it. I would like to be able visualize what you see as you are writing, through well worded imagery. Overall, this seems like it will be an excellent story. :D