The story of a warrior who lost

In an eerie,dark forest

There was an unpleasant storm

Clouds fiercely moved

Trees wildly swayed

There was rain and thunder

But amidst the trees,sat a warrior

Who lost.

It killed,the feeling.

Deep pain pain in the eyes

Which so melancholic,at loss.

Shattered were his dreams

Too heart-broken he was

After long,he started to weep

He couldn’t eat nor sleep

He tried hard so

The pain wouldn’t go

It felt cruciating

He could feel himself dying

Second by second

He had lost everything

He wished right there,his life end.

He could take it no more

Death he ultimately wished for

He utterred a few last words,

“Come thou angel,

With your loving arms,

Take me away-

To heaven or hell,

So the pain couldn’t stay!”

He had experiences life’s worst part

He felt so betrayed

And that night,a warrior died,

With a wounded heart.

Reviews

[M.Babu]

the uniqueness of this piece awed me:)
This was my favorite part
"In an eerie,dark forest
There was an unpleasant storm
Clouds fiercely moved
Trees wildly swayed
There was rain and thunder
But amidst the trees,sat a warrior
Who lost.
It killed,the feeling.
Deep pain pain in the eyes
Which so melancholic,at loss."

Nice job!

[Coyote Poetry]

“Come thou angel,
With your loving arms,
Take me away-
To heaven or hell,
So the pain couldn’t stay!”
A amazing tale in the poem. I like how you create emotion and desire to stop the pain in your words. A sad ending to a excellent poem. In some cultures death is the reward for defeat.
Coyote

[Dai Edenburough]

Wow! what a cool original piece! Very different.