Cancer

She tried so hard to stay,

but the cancer rotted her life away.

With nothing to say,

he'd weep and he cried

his pain was deep and he tried

to hold himself together

but the pain would move and sliver

in his heart forever.

She was gone

and he couldn't move on,

now with nothing to say,

he loves her to this day.

Reviews

[cycy]

this one is really sad :'(

[a schizophrenic writer]

It is, but I hope the sadness didn't ruin the poem entirely. its darker than most my stuff

[cycy]

for amoment there i thought you would kill the guy too, now that would have been unbearably sad.
read morefor amoment there i thought you would kill the guy too, now that would have been unbearably sad.
"and he couldn't move on,
now with nothing to say,"
at that point i was like..noooooo, please don't kill him too :(

[a schizophrenic writer]

I actually had him commit suicide at the end in my written version before I typed it out but typing it I thought it would be too much.

[cycy]

hahahahah, yeah that's how i also played it out in my mind, based on your usual style of writing but either way, it takes nothing away from the poem coz it's really good hey.

[a schizophrenic writer]

well thank you, and yes my poetry all has quite a sad theme :P

[Katherine R.]

Love it! It's really emotionally moving. Very well written, friend.

[a schizophrenic writer]

Thank you for reviewing!

[Katherine R.]

No problem, friend!