Help and Pain

I want back up, but I can't face reality...

I give up, give in, and fall down.

Falling till I don’t know where is the ground.

I look for others, but the burdens came from them.

Should I just stop in my tracks and quit the endeavor?

I need the floor to feel what it is to land.

The urge to stand back up has hit me more than ever.

The defeat though leaves me miserable on the floor with no plan.

I need a hand to pull me back up, but I don’t want more pain.

Others have put me to shame, and I have a part in the blame.

I want back up, but I can’t confront what comes next…

Help…

Reviews

[Cole O'Connor]

I like this a lot!

It captures a lot of emotion and sorrow within your words.

Your word usage has definitely improved! I'd still keep working on it more, because it can only get better from here. c:

You got your point across well, and gave imagery to your readers. c:

The only thing I have to really critique about this is your flow was a little off at times.

Overall, fantastic job. Keep writing, keep working, keep progressing!

-Cole. :D