Once in My Life

 

You never knew that once in time I fell for you

You'll never see that once you meant the world to me

She was there blinding you to my smile

You never felt the love I was trying to tell you

When I looked into your eyes

 

When I met you, I fell so deeply in love

Not realizing I was breaking my heart

Now I know we could never be

Because your heart belonged to her

And not to me

 

Maybe you're not really meant for me

I'd understand why we could never be

But I want you to know that

I'll always be there for the rest of our lives

'Cause I still see the magic in your eyes

And I feel so blessed that I met someone like you

Once in my life

Reviews

[Glen Yumang Manese]

this has the no regrets ---
feel in the lines...
you're willing to settle the score...
and give words for what they mean...

[Ernie Roman]

ah yea, i like your take on this subject, like it sucks that you couldnt get that person but instead of being bitter about it, you are grateful for that moment in time...hope it makes sense...its still a good piece...awesome...

[Mariam R]

i think this poem is so awesome...its really shows how it feels to love someone and them not loving you back but you love them enough that you want them to be happy...(hope that make sense) Love Mirrabye

[Miranda Schmidt]

Like the sentiment in this one. Very relatable subject and well expressed here I think. It might be interesting to explore what could be done with the form of the piece. At the moment it feels very prose-y, which is fine if that's what you're going for. But since you're writing it as a poem you have a certain amount of grammatical/oraganizational leeway. I wonder what would happen if you broke up some of the lines, maybe took out some extraneous words and phrases, just played around with it. Might be interesting. Just a thought.
I also like the way you seem to be using the idea of once. Lots of possible interpretations. "once you meant the world to me"- like the fairy tale phrase 'once upon a time' and also like he doesn't anymore, "once in my life"- as if the speaker may never feel quite the same way again- about the subject, about anyone. I liked the idea of the last stanza. The speaker isn't angry. She feels "blessed" to have known such a person. And the "I'll always be there"- that's a good thought to have at the end. Nice poem. I enjoyed it. : )

cheers,
miranda