Forbidden Sky

Memoirs of the flightless angel.

 

I lie on my field of dreams

Watching the black heavens

Where Diana smiles at me mockingly

 

I envy the stars that laugh forever      

They encircle the dome from whence I came

 

It's as if I am desperately trying to reach

The sky from which I was forbidden

Since the day I gave up my wings

For an earthly love

 

 

Written: October 6, 2006 @ 09:37 pm

© Maxinne Marie

 

 

Reviews

[JlB]

still love it,
`jl

[~ Tex]

I love this!

[JlB]

How wonderful, I do absolutley love this one.
Especially then end,


Since the day I gave up my wings
for an earthly love

great job here
jl

[Cari Lynn Vaughn]

It reminds me of Wim Wenders "Wings of Desire."
If you haven't seen it, go out and rent it immediately!
Wonderful poem! Loved it.

[Mary Elizabeth Meade St..]

such a wonderful piece that you have penned here! has a dream-like quality! Clear and concise imagery, smooth flow and excellent rhythm all combined made for an enjoyable read! Thanks so much for sharing! Looking forward to reading more of your work!
Peace~~
Mary

[Shannon K.]

I enjoyed it. It was kinda weird though, Maybe talking about someone dying? or someone who is dead. I like this though. Keeps me gueesing, even if im like soooo far off. Oh well....good job.
S.k.

[Tabitha Kaufman]

Breath-taking. This was very beautiful.

[Benjamin L. Weekly]

This is nice work, Maxinne. You convey pictures well, helping us to get into the mind of the fallen angel.

I hope you don't mind if I show you a few ways to tighten this poem up (I can't help it!)

"I lie on a field of dreams
Watching the black heavens
Where Diana smiles mockingly

I envy stars that laugh forever
Encircling the dome from whence I came

I am so desperately trying to reach
The sky from which I was forbidden
Since the day I lost my wings
For an earthly love."

I hope this helps you. I wish I could write poetry as beautiful. Good luck, Maxinne.

[Insanemom5]

How beautifully put

[Jade Aril]

I love it, it reminds me of the series Charmed. Leo and Piper...*sigh*