Forbidden Sky

Memoirs of the flightless angel.

 

I lie on my field of dreams

Watching the black heavens

Where Diana smiles at me mockingly

 

I envy the stars that laugh forever      

They encircle the dome from whence I came

 

It's as if I am desperately trying to reach

The sky from which I was forbidden

Since the day I gave up my wings

For an earthly love

 

 

Written: October 6, 2006 @ 09:37 pm

© Maxinne Marie

 

 

Reviews

[Ice Queen of the Vampir..]

Ooh, I love this poem. This is such a fabulous write, great job!!!

Heather

[Courtney Lou]

You're thinking too much! Or at least thats how I feel. It's good! Don't get me wrong. But (it may just be me) I don't feel myselft getting lost in your words. I feel like their just passing me by. They don't reach out and choke me, like they should. Evole (spell check) more. Just Write.

[The Autumn Faerie]

I fear the temptation is too great that we often feel as though we must give up our wings for earthly pleasures.
Even so, you mustn't regret the thing you once desired most...
Nicely penned.

[Poeticpiers]

interesting. a new slant on an age old story of immortals giving up immortality for love.
Well presented in poetic prose

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This is soooo good!!! I found myself feeling sorry for this wingless angel. This poem has a lot of depth! Great work!

[A. L. Robinson]

lovely poem!

[Chaos X 3]

oooOoo... I like this piece. It has a kinda regretful feeling to it. Good job...

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well written maxinne... especially liked the ending.

[Sarah Williams]

This is both delicate and haunting. I like the use of "Diana", and the union of the heavens and the earth through the poems narrator. Beautifully done.

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Diana being the ancient god?
I like the idea of the angel becoming mortal again, and all for love. Not something I think I would do, but the concept is a good one. I can just see you lying in a field (or simply on the grass) with all this going through your head.

Poetically pleasing.