Sapphire Dolphins and Aubergine Skies (The Shore of Three Oceans)

Perhaps mythical creatures really do exist — only beyond our mortality, beyond our dreams. Maybe they exist as "souls" — and only when we become souls can we exist with them.

The sun was slowly drowning itself into the deep, leaving me in a soliloquy once again. The wind swept through my hair as I gazed at the purple waters calmly colliding with the shore of three oceans, where a timeless memory echoes quietly...

 

You pulled me by the hand and held my waist, your body inclined towards mine. In a breath of a moment, I was poisoned by your venomous kiss, leaving me frozen underneath the cloudburst that drove the sea mad - the water snaked through the sand in cadence with the song of the thunder.

 

I was shivering in your frosty presence, drenched in the cascades of the somber clouds. And you haunted me with what I came to realize as our last embrace.

 

Amid the ardor we felt, we were both desolate. And nature felt our misery as told by the outraging poetry of the sky and the sea.

 

Before long, the great yellow ball of fire arose from the horizon, illuminating the shore of three oceans with its ardent beams.

 

The sapphire dolphins danced under the vast waters and through the salty midair. They had come to bring you back home. You are a creature of the sea, and you can not ever belong with me, my love, my prince.

 

You left, but the touch of your hand lingered on in my skin. I watched you descend into the depths as cold crystals fell from my eyes, blurring my vision of that fateful parting.

 

And from then on, I had told myself that you shall forever be a distant dream that took flight with the creatures of the depths. I urged myself to believe that you had always been unreal, mythical prince of the oceans, only a silent reverie isolated from the reach of an entity of the earth.

 

...I watched the dolphins play in the aubergine skies distortedly reflected on the serenity of the waves, colliding with the shore of three oceans. Suddenly, I felt a familiar frosty presence. I closed my eyes as I was poisoned by a soul-freezing kiss... His Highness still haunted me with his embrace.

 

I opened my eyes. A hundred eons it has been since I became the remnant of the soul of an earthen maiden that lived far beyond the dream of a dream. Realizing what I have become, knowing it was impossible to die again, I walked into the waters, dived with the dolphins and creatures that belonged to the love of my lonesome heart. As I flew through the water, a transformation took place without my knowing it. I was only a soul as I embraced the sea. Yet now that I am within the three oceans, no longer on their shore, I became a creature again, this time, one that belonged to the sea.

 

I kept on swimming through a world no mortal had ever lived in, and I saw a tower of light where merpeople played.

 

In the distance, I saw the prince. A hundred eons he had waited for me.

 

 

Written July 25, 2007 @ 11:00 PM © Maxinne Marie

 

Author's Note

Written for a photo challenge, but I've been so inspired lately that I came up with such an imagination when I saw that picture.

Reviews

[Rc R. Vagilidad]

"Realizing what I have become, knowing it was impossible to die again. I walked into the waters and dived with the dolphins and creatures that belonged to the love of my lonesome heart." -- work on technical strata. the pausing ( by the use of comma..or change it into ; ) notice i change just a bit of it. never mind if im wrong. feel free to ignore btw. hehe


".....distortedly reflected on the serenity of the waves" - i like the ironical speech figures, i presume it is not accidental to visualize a waving scheme as peaceful... hehe.. but presuming it is very provocative measure to write with.


over-all.. an outstanding piece.. i see this piece as a very wide in range if you to think the picture alone was the basis for it. exceptional imagination should i say. great. i would rather say youre a 'prose' with the mind.

[Atlanta Carter]

In general, I like this, although at times I felt dizzy from the barrage of sensory imagery. I assume that there is a difference between the roman and italic sections. Perhaps the italic is a dream or daydream. I would have liked to see some variation between the two in terms of vocabulary and description. The waking part being more simple. Also, you have a venomous kiss and a soul-freezing kiss, the first freezing you and the second paralyzing you. That seems a little repetitive.

Did you mean the "argent" (silver-white) beams of the sun, as opposed ardent (fervent)?

I like the dreaminess of it and some of the description is first rate, although at times I think you go a little overboard. Perhaps that is just what the picture prompt did for you.

[Vincent Weathers]

"The sun was slowly drowning itself into the deep," this is quite a creative way to say the sun set in. It makes the feeling all the more troublesome. You've done quite well with this piece. One thing I noticed about this piece was the style it was written. More like the inner clockwork of the piece. Most of the sentences are composed of x, x. (To put it in symbolistic terms).
"I kept on swimming through a world no mortal had ever lived in, and I saw a tower of light where merpeople played" "In the distance, I saw the prince. A hundred eons he had waited for me."
"And from then on, I had told myself that you shall forever be a distant dream that took flight with the creatures of the depths. I urged myself to believe that you had always been unreal, mythical prince of the oceans, only a silent reverie isolated from the reach of an entity of the earth. " Do you see? But also there is a different part, which stood out to me. Very rarely there was a "x, x... x"
"The sapphire dolphins danced under the vast waters and through the salty midair. They had come to bring you back home. You are a creature of the sea, and you can not ever belong with me, my love, my prince. " The two sentences beside the last one was a single, simple sentence. I thought that stood out. All in all, I'd say the way you have used your writing ability to draw a picture for us to view, it makes me wonder what to think. "Love is the bond that can defeat even death" "Falling in love, and loss" I can only wonder. I'd have to read it over again just to decide. Good job.

[Alex]

these two lines touched me unimaginably -
1- was shivering in your frosty presence, drenched in the cascades of the somber clouds. And you haunted me with what I came to realize as our last embrace.
2-You left, but the touch of your hand lingered on in my skin. I watched you descend into the depths as cold crystals fell from my eyes, blurring my vision of that fateful parting.


Love can be the cruelest thing �..This was a beautiful read ,very potent and touching ,loved it ,thank you for sharing

[Lyanne]

hello!
cute.. made my imagination play..
a good piece..

''..was shivering in your frosty presence, drenched in the cascades of the somber clouds. And you haunted me with what I came to realize as our last embrace.

Amid the ardor we felt, we were both desolate. And nature felt our misery as told by the outraging poetry of the sky and the sea..."

i love the words..;o)

[Yira Simone]

Wow...this was...WOW! I LOVED the imagery you used to write this piece. I love the way this story just weaves itself like the waves of the oceans you spoke of. It was as if I was THERE and I could feel what you feel. I think that you really did a great job of capturing the beauty of that photo. BTW, you have a great imagination!!! Great work!-Catrina

[Carly J.c.]

Wonderful! You are a great writer- very descriptive and colorful, as well as creative. Soulful.

[Jeremy]

You are definitely a talented writer, this was a very very well written poem/story. Even though I'm a guy, I am definitely a sucker for romance. This was that, a story with such ebb and flow that mesmerizes the mind, and of course touches the soul. Keep up the good work Maxine. It is writing like this that keeps me reading, and leaves me inspired for my own. Very nice!

[Jacob]

This is a well done prose poem, which are difficult to pull off. It's impressive. There are so many wonderful images in there is tends to get a little thick though. Might pare down a bit.

Oh, and in a poem of such outstanding word choice and imagery I found myself frowning at "the great yellow ball of fire arose from the horizon". You've proven that you can do better so I expect you to! :)

[Gillzy]

This is so pretty. And I love the mythical feel to it, you managed to really create a beautiful scene with your words. Absolutely stunning.

I'm not so sure if I would label this a poem... as it seems more story-like... but meh, who's cared?

"cold crystals fell from my eyes, blurring my vision of that fateful parting"
That line really stood out to me as being something wonderful, just really describing it, perfectly.

Thank you :) x

[Gar Avoch]

Beautiful stuff. Thanks, send me any more you remember like this.