Dreams

I lay down on the clouds,
Fate moves me forward,
To where my dreams lie,
I see my will to live,to dream,
I see the love in my life,
The hate i have endured,
The pain i have suffered,
The joy i have felt,
The doubts I've had,
The victories i enjoyed,
The tears i lost,
The laughter i found,
My dreams are my realities
They take me to the point of my achievement
My happiness, my love
These are my dreams 

Author's Note

I was really shaky on this so i'm not sure it'll be good.

Reviews

[brwneyedgirl00]

That was a very good poem. I can relate to it, but it seems like you are trying too hard. You just have to let it flow, let it just come to you.

[The Verse: A Poetry Jou..]

Honestly, I see it comes from you, but you run too much.
try playing with the stanzas and punctuation besides commas to create tone. A bit of polishing will do much good.