Facing the Pain

This poem is the product of the pain i felt in a relationship with someone who was too stuck in the past to realize that I will be by his side no matter what.

I see the pain you face even through your smile,

You tell me that the booze and drugs help you run from the past

Im not blind I can see that you don’t want to be that way

You try your hardest to hide from the demons but they find you fast

It tears you up inside and it burns you down to the floor

If its the way you want to live, go

But I won’t give up ‘cause you’re the one thing that keeps me alive

I want you, I need you, why can’t we be us.

Forget the pain forget the fear. Let go of the past and hold on to me because I am right here.

Author's Note

I would like some feedback. What do you think? What would you change? How can I improve my poem?

Reviews

[maria ( rose)]

Hello , Writing poetry is an art, a way of expression and finding meaning in few words. A melody of passion OR pain flowing out onto the page/pages, words that flow into each other and yet express the inner most thoughts and feelings of those who read the words.
I think you did a wonderful job with your first poem..keep up the great work and welcome !!

[Scarlet Victory]

I really appreciate your review and warm welcome! I look forward to reading your poetry.

[maria ( rose)]

my pleasure:) and thank you!

[IamRealTusoul]

This is a nice poem, I like the way you arrange the writing and how you're able to capture the heart of the readers...

[Scarlet Victory]

Hello everyone! It is my first time posting a poem of mine online so I'm pretty excited. I am hoping yall can give me feedback?