Never Turning Back

Water collects in a bulb at the end

of those silked drawn strands

 

A salty river runs down, dropping

off to the softest land

 

The saddest look is one you've never seen

 

The tress has dried and the wind comes now

and pulls it straight back

 

That thin straight line gives the hint

of a curve to the north

 

The happiest look is one you've never seen

 

You know it the moment you're set free

Some day I pray that you can take me

 

Confusion hides behind those glasses

on your perfect eyes

 

I'll try and say it again

 

Hoping you'll provide me with one last surprise

 

But I see it again

 

The scariest look is one you've seen a million times

 

You know it the moment you're set free

But for now that doesn't include me

 

I run and hide behind the dissident door

 

I'll do it again

 

And stay till I can't see your face anymore

 

But I see it again

 

The most painful look is the one inside of you

Author's Note

I know it's kind of messy. I like it that way.

Reviews

[Althea Tremaine]

Interesting.

I thoroughly enjoyed reading this... something about it almost gives it an arm that pulls you into the screen of your computer.

There were times where you lost the trance-like rhythm you formulated at the beginning of your piece. I'd revise and edit a few more times to truly let it carry out its power. Good job.

[Kyla H]

I love every line of this, great wording.

[Kasey]

wow. this is great. i love it. i can't decide witch line is my fav. this is really good. there is a lot of feeling in this and i can feel it myself... it a weird feeling. huh.... anyways great write!!!

[BEEGE]

I thought this was okay.
And you might be right because I think
music added to it would have made it more
enjoyable. I liked it though.

[Angel Baby]

Truly enjoyed your write, captivated me....thank you!