Memories

Please dont be brutal , do be kind ; A personal piece.

 

By the very thoughts of you,

I have become your poem.

So spill your ink on me.

Then see how far your words fly.

 

Since I lost my first romance,

You keep coming to my history.

I needed you to perfect my dead art now.

So where are you now? Where are you now?

 

Now let me veil your thoughts.

In blue velvet box with secret lock,

So that you will remain silent and personal,

In time to come; pleasure and treasure

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Nebunova]

I can see how this poem relates to my "fear" poem, although mine had less to do with a person in specific and more to do with a feeling or "entity" that stands in my way. very nice poem though. made me think of a special someone.

[Lyn Anderson]

Skillful simple and direct. A lot of punctuation but that is likely a matter of preference rather than anything meaningful.

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

Thank you so much dear for the review and infact it has given me so much pleasure . Yes lot of punctuation involved here to create vibration and perfect sound of words in the reader...but I love your review on this one and will follow your suggestion in time to come...with much love and respect to you from sayed mudasir

[Lourisa]

I have to agree with Sami and Julie, the ending is amazing. I like the imagery you used in the poem, vivid and original. I also love these lines:
"So spill your ink on me.
Then see how far your words fly."

[Sami Khalil]

"Now let me veil your thoughts.

In blue velvet box with secret lock,

So that you will remain silent and personal,

In time to come; pleasure and treasure"

A very nice poem. I like the ending the most...:).....................

[MsJewel]

Memories should be held close to the heart my friend. Your poem is lovely. I really like the last stanza.

:) Julie

[sayed Mudasir Ali]

Thank you so much Julie. I am really thrilled by your nice words here.