Speechless

I can try to put to words

the way I'm

attacking this situation

but what will it honestly give you?

 

Two hands

full of black ink 24 pt font

seeping through the cracks

between your fingers as they

glob and slide to the floor.

 

No, I can't

do that. Maybe if I

say it as elegantly as I can

with words that bounce off my tongue

and smack you in the face. Maybe then.

 

But now you have

a red mark on your porous porcelain skin

where I tried my best and it fades not long after

the air that provided it gets swept away.

 

There is no way to say what I need to get

off my chest so I can take in deep

breaths again. A simple

glance. An empathetic sigh.

I gave you all the guidance you need.

Reviews

[Nicholas Hallows]

This is great!

seeping through the cracks
between your fingers as they
glob and slide to the floor - I especially like the use of 'glob' for this black ink. Gives a great tar texture.

words that bounce off my tongue
and smack you in the face - another good one.

I absolutely love the physical qualities you have attributed to words here.

Very well done!

NH

[George Love]

The flow for me was a touch off. Did not seem to roll off the tongue when read aloud. I like the imagery.

[JC Fox]

Excellent rhythm to this poem and great flow, all in all a good poem!

[J.P.O.et]

I like how you arranged this one, no need to end sentences
on the same line or whatever, carry them into the next and punctuate
there. I love the 2nd verse and the ending is so abrupt and fitting.

J.P.O.et

[Robert Luna]

The ideas here are wonderfully expressed and speak to me in a way that I both can relate and appreciate to the heartfelt passion they are written with. The words that we choose to define our lives can neither been written or typed. They are the words that have to be felt and expressed, through the act of living and breathing. The world needs to be embraced as a whole to save the human race. We are the children and the parents of the future. Believe in ourselves as though there is no other way to save the day. It rests upon our shoulders to bear the burden of freedom.

Great Job!!!!!!

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

thats some deep writing. nicely done.