That Dream

I saw you today,
i saw you today,
i saw you today,
my Granny!
 
You looked lovely,
You looked cute,
You looked so sweet
my Granny!

we laughed,
we talked,
and enjoyed a lot
my Granny!

You  kissed my cheeks
i kissed your cheeks,
and i hugged you tight
my Granny!

we laughed for long,
and talked for long,
and everything around
was so calm...

I could feel the air,
I could feel smell the flowers,
and could  really feel
the essence
of your rhymes and stories!

you asked me about my well being,
and i always replied smiling,
and your smile 
was so soothing

The stars twinkled beautifully,
and the fireflies danced wonderfully,
and everything around
was so heavenly!

I slept in your lap,
before all turned fad,
and you kissed me on my head
and caressed me
my Granny!

you smiled at me
and i felt your smile,
although my eyes were closed
completely..

I felt like a kid
who was with a fairly,
who knew and
loved her truly!
and made her feel heavenly..

I forgot for those moments,
that you don't exist actually,
but that what i dreamt
proves me wrong completely.

although you aren't alive
but you still dwell in me
my Granny!
Dream is the place
which still keeps us together
my dear Granny!

I loved you that day,
I love you today,
and will love you forever
my Granny!

And may the dream
i saw that day,
be one of those
i often see...

Author's Note

my granny has been a very special person in my life. It was years back i lost her, and saw her in my dream one day.

i hope you all enjoy reading this write, and please feel free to give your views.
all your critiques, comments and appreciation are much welcomed.

regards
saumya

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I like that you wrote this story-in-a-poem where it seems like you're with your granny, but then we find out it was just a dream. This shows good imagination & there was much enthusiasm thru-out. I feel there's a bit more repetition than what I prefer, especially in the first few stanzas. I think this part could've been done with more imaginative descriptions. When you write with more details (instead of generalities like "lovely, cute, sweet"), it helps the reader get to know the specific things you love about your granny. But we can definitely feel the love from your poem!

[Saumya]

Thank you so much for such a Lovely review dear Margie :)
Thnx again for pointing out the mistakes in this piece, I'll be really glad if you please mail me the corrections required, and also the suggestion and examples how I can refine this piece :)

Your visit to my page, and your reviews always make make me smile:)

Thnx again!
(((Hugs)))

[Lily Finch]

Sweet lovely poetic memory...well penned :)

[Saumya]

Thank you:)

[Shardbearer99]

Hi there! I really loved this. My gran was special to me, she was one of these people that actually made me feel good about myself. I love my parents even when they drive me up the walls sometimes. But my gran was really special to me. She would treat me to five pounds "dollars" in American terms every Saturday night I stayed over night at hers. I loved her company, even if it was just lying next to her, watching s****y TV programs. And when she dies, I've never felt so completely. utterly alone. She died...three/four years ago. I'm sorry to say that I cannot quite recall how long it's been since her passing; I try not to think about it, it hurts too much. I really miss her, and I became detached, isolated myself from my friends for two weeks, I drank ridiculous amounts of alcohol two/three times a week, cried every night I closed my eyes, knowing I would never see her again. I just found this poem really meaningful and powerful. Grannies are special. The time we spend with our grannies are special and should be cherished. It hurts like f**k when they pass. But you can always see them in your dreams, the memories of the good times that you had with them. You wrote a really powerful, inspiring poem about someone that holds a special place in all our hearts. I honestly know what it is like to lose a granny, and it sucks like hell. I still cry sometimes, thinking of her. Thank you so much for writing such a beautiful poem about someone that means a lot to you, it was very powerful and emotional.

[Patrick O'Neil]

Its amazing that some dreams are just so real,like we can relay see the ones we love again,and perhaps what we see as dreams is more than that,perhaps its real.

[Saumya]

thanx :) m HAPPY THAT you could relate:)

[TL Boehm]

what a lovely poetic memory of your granny. I truly miss mine too. Well penned

[Sharon L.H. Kelly]

Sweet dreams of our loved are so very special. You captured the feelings perfectly in this peaceful and meaningful write.

[Baby Ricochet]

You should always honor you ansestors. Like Granny

[lyss]

This is a very happy poem and a lot can be said for reading a poem so full of joy. My only critique would be that in the beginning you repeated things too often, but thank you for making me smile as I read the poem. :)

[LunarSong]

I love this, very beautiful, great job expressing how our loved ones will always be with us. :) I did notice two things though, in stanza six you put, "I could feel smell the flowers" I don't know if you meant to put "feel" in there. Also in stanza eleven it says, "I felt like a kid who was with a fairly" I think you meant fairy. But overall really great poem. It made me think of my grandma who passed away a few years ago, since then I've always felt like she's been close by me. :) thanks

[Phantom Heart]

Man, now I miss my gram grams. She was a lady till the end. It kills me that she is gone, but not forever. :) Nice poem. I like how you made dream a place, when you wrote, "Dream is a place which still keeps us together."