Friends... they make us happy, they make us sad. Life seeks balance, always and change is the only constant. Everything has its limits; everything can "break." Even friends. Beyond life, who knows? Perhaps the rules change then. Perhaps.
100 constant changes
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
yes Tam i absolutely agree with u:) but till the time we have friends with us, life seems really goo.. read moreyes Tam i absolutely agree with u:) but till the time we have friends with us, life seems really good:)
thank you so much for the review:)
Saumya I liked much of this. I don't know if you consciously avoided ending with one of the stanzas that finish with the word Friend - I think it would have lent a final 'Ahh' to the work. I felt that the last stanza was an afterthought or a separate piece - maybe it could have been included earlier - also it contains 1 example of a 'with' - the brine, but then 3 examples of without which sullied the end for me.
This here -
"The one, who's the happiest,
and celebrates more than you,
on your success and achievements..."
blew me away - its for me the Gem - its glorious!!
I really liked the poems imagery of a perfect friend and more to the point a compassionate friend.
The idea of placing ones own needs above their own has always rang true in my ideals as a friend and is displayed lovingly and thoughtfully.
My only adjustments would be to shorten for potency. But unfiltered and true to you is always the truest form.
Thanks for a beautiful read.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
thank you Aaron:) m happy that you got the zest of my write:)
Friends really are an important part of a person's life.
Without a friend, life can be... well.... I don't think it will be a life if you won't have any friends.
Nice poem overall.
You write simply and your poems contain a powerful message. That's why I love your poems.
Keep writing :-)
- Your friend
Friendship the precious, undefined and unmeasurable relationship.....nice poem...the days spend with friends are unforgettable...beautiful description of friend...my favourite paragraphs are 2nd and 3rd...the whole poem is amazing though...nicely penned...great work :)
NOTES: I'm not sure the color works with this one. And, again, I recommend a second copy editing pass and finding a balanced meter. It helps to read a piece aloud when trying to find that balance. There's a musical quality to language and especially to poetry.
I have had a difficult time collecting friends for the most part. I imagine the reason for that is my nomadic lifestyle for a huge part of my life. I was never around long enough to develop "real" friends, it seemed I was always moving on down the road or across that mountain. I believe I have found a few friends via the Internet, but I'll probably never know for sure . . . Sorry to appear so gloomy, I really don't feel that way, it is just a fact of life for me. Enjoyed your poem very much.
Posted 10 Years Ago
10 Years Ago
its fyn:) glad you enjoyed my write:)
n about friends,mmmm... i think friendship takes times, .. read moreits fyn:) glad you enjoyed my write:)
n about friends,mmmm... i think friendship takes times, it has its own ups n downs, but once you get through, you'll find it worth:)
all the best:)
O! This is amazing. The language, the content, and the repetition of 'The one' which is more than the name you called it 'Friend' I perceived that 'friend' is the man that lives above. The poem is inspiring, touching, especially when we understand that there is somebody who's for us in every situation. Well done Saumya. Hope you will write again.
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