Reminiscense

just a simple poem on memories which play a major role in our life, they fill life with colors....

Reminiscence,  or

simply remembrance, is

that precious box

that holds all our memories

of past and present...

Someone very dear,

and close to us

who now, no more

exists in present,

is so sweetly alive in us

in reminiscence...

A situation which once

proved us best,

and also the one

which proved us worst

can clearly be re imagined

through reminiscence...

A time when we were winners,

and also the time

when we were losers

what made us win,

and what led us lose,

is all brilliantly embedded 

in our Reminiscence..

How strong and surprising

is its presence,

that it forms the clear picture of our

past and present memories,

exactly the same

as it once happened...

People come, meet and go

but they leave the reminiscence...

Situations come, treat, teach and go

but they leave the reminiscence....

Everyhing that happens,

leaves its essence,

in a wonderful form,

called..

 Reminiscence.....

Such a marvelous miracle

 is this remembrance,

which is always with us

in all conditions

and enriching life,

with its sweet and sour essence,

with time's slow and steady advent..

Author's Note

i hope you all enjoyed reading it:)
please tell me if you have any suggestions to make this piece much better...
all your suggestions are highly welcomed:)
please do rate and review..

many thanks
saumya:)

Reviews

[barleygirl]

Your message is clear & interesting, but as I mentioned in another recent review, everything is stated in general terms. This is why a reviewer such as "ginsy" (below) may make such an observation that everything seems redundant. I believe the reason for this is becuz every other poem sounds the same when all are written in general terms. As writers, we must reach deep for the specific details of knowable, touchable situations, & convey them in word pictures using all the senses . . . these are the ways we make each message stand out, instead of just saying some general idea about life that's been said before too many times. Instead of saying "someone very dear and close to us" (ho-hum!) . . . SHOW ME what this person is/was to you! WHY DO WE CARE if this person is remembered or not? SHOW instead of telling . . . each little remembrance that lasts so much longer than the actual situations of life. Paint word pictures of the way he/she looked at you as if he/she wanted to . . . (fill in the blanks) . . . use unusual comparisons to things we can all relate to . . . don't just tell me there's a box of memories . . . SHOW ME what memories are in that box . . . is it the dried up corsage from your first prom? what's in there? what matters to you? I'm sorry for going on a rampage here, but it drives me crazy when a person who writes so well, as you do, & you clearly enjoy writing, but you're not injecting yourself & your essence & your specific observations about life into your messages. I want to kick you in the butt to wake up your senses & to shake loose the details of what makes a memorable moment memorable for YOU!

[Shirlena]

I like your writing very much Saumya because it is uniquely you, please never lose your "own" voice. I think the more you write the better you get, also reading others poetry can give you an idea of how you would like to write more extensively or even to improve. I have been writing 15 years but I never stop improving or learning. Thank you for becoming a friend.

[ayosonolowo]

Nice written, and i really enjoyed the read, keep on writing.

[BlackRose]

I enjoyed this. It flows so beautifully. It got me thinking of good times in my life, also the wonderful people that may have shared it with me or was that great memory I long to never forget.

[Anand Sehgal]

Very good write. Just make it a little more compact . emotions delivered nicely though !

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I enjoyed this made me think of my dear friend passed away last week,Great work! I only rate in my heart, And that where it lays:)

[Saumya]

thank you so much Jonathan:) i agree, the pain of losing someone very dear to you is really pathetic, everything changes and is healed with time, but this kind of reminiscence leave a deep scratch in our hearts! i got you rating friend:) thanx again:)

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Your ever so welcome:)

[Abdul Aziz]

Reminiscence is a theme that never goes out of season, I think :) This is a simple and clean write focussing on the subject very well.
I particularly like this stanza:
"People come, meet and go
but they leave the reminiscence...
Situations come, treat, teach and go
but they leave the reminiscence...."
Memories are like the guides we use to walk again on roads we've trodden. Well written :)

[Saumya]

thank you so much Abdul:) very lad you enjoyed the write:)

[Mark Heathcote]

Nicely thought out… and has a lovely calming flow to it all.

[Saumya]

thank you so much for seeing the depth of this write my friend:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Yes, the sweet and the sour of life are remembered and both are cherished. What a lovely write. I liked the change in font color. It was very effective. Lydi**

[Saumya]

thank you dear:) thanks for your visit and kind words:) glad u enjoyed:)

[Bobbie Coelho]

I think it is a beautiful poem. I lki the way you repeat the last word it is a good reminder

[SyberRose]

Enjoyed Saumya...memories are all some people have...and this was beautifully penned with the beauty you alway bring forth in your poems....Rose:)

[Saumya]

thank you so much dear for your kind words :)
and you indeed forgot something you always have for me in your reviews dear...OK i'll do it this time for you...."hugs:)"
saumya:)

[SyberRose]

Hugsss back sweetie.

[Saumya]

thanx again dear:) grand hugs to you too:) have a wonderful day:)