The Puppies..

One morning,

when i stood behind

my window,

enjoying the cool breeze,

and the delicate morning sunshine,

I saw something

really fine,

which i'd simply

love to define....

I saw the puppies,

one and two and three and four,

all sitting

in front of my door..

One was white,

the other black,

one was brown,

and the other

white, with some black spots

over his body and head..

They looked lovely,

as all animal's kids normally do,

but it was 

their little faces, innocent eyes,

and tiny toes which made them

really sweet..

I couldn't stop,

seeing them from far,

so ran downstairs

to see them 

more clearly than from far..

but oh! i saw their mother,

standing beside those four,

filled with anger,

till her nose..

as if warning saying,

no need to come close..

Later that day,

when i saw their mother,

not present their anymore,

I went near them,

and saw them playing,

and some, even

biting each others toes..

I put some chapattis,

for them to eat,

but sadly, they couldn't,

as they didn't had teeth..

Each time when i 

went near them,

they came running to me,

licking my feet,

as if they waited for me

to play with them,

whenever i was free...

And being with them,

really made me pleased..

At evenings

when the children played,

these four eagerly ran behind them

to play,

and this at times,

made the kids

really afraid...

When children used to play

with the ball,

they grabbed it

in their little mouths and feet,

and passed it on to all...

and the game turned

even more interesting overall..

We named those four,

by four great names,

Jack, Joe, Peter, and Jane..

They hated chapattis,

but loved the candies,

that we fed them with,

again and again..

They enjoyed with us,

the most they could..

and we loved them all,

more than anyone else would..

Days passed, and they grew big,

but they are as great,

as they always stood,

even more than that, before they would

and much more than, a human ever would...

They guard our house,

in our absence

and detered unknown creatures 

from entering there..

Just some chapattis,and

sweet candies,

and our bond became

so strong and happy..

Lots of love,

to those little puppies

who taught us

how should a human be,

caring, lovely, sweet,and

above all,

the most faithful creature indeed... 

Author's Note

i hope you enjoyed reading this...
i would be really happy if you will review and rate it:)
regards,
saumya

Reviews

[Astro]

This is a gorgeous tale about puppies and the love that humans share with animals, dogs in particular. The beginning of your poem is really good, I was kind of sad when the rhyming disappeared but the story you describe in great imagery is solid and makes for a nice read. Grammatically, this is one of your better writes for sure. In this line the verb tense should be changed, "didn't had teeth.." to "didn't 'have' teeth.." and your use of the word "abstain" isn't really appropriate because it means 'stay away from' and not 'keep away from' which is more of what you were going for. I suggest: dissuade, discourage or deter maybe if you want to go even simpler, 'stop'.

All in all a very nice poem Saumya

[Saumya]

Thank you soo much Astro:) really glad you liked it:)

[It's Me, The Miracle]

With this poem, you proved that it is not the grammar but the ideas that makes literature alive....good work...congrats...keep it up

[Dr. Wood ?]

I agree with Leslie...sweet and flowing

[smilempsn]

..hehe.. Cute tale of Puppies :)

[Sami Khalil]

A joyous write along with the puppies...:)

[Leslie Philibert]

sweet, romantic poetry with a flowing story, well written

[Prritiy]

i thoroughly enjoyed reading this without a break so that means :) you wrote nicely :)

best wishes

[Nia Hope]

Very sweet poem! A few grammar mistakes but I love the descriptions. Keep up the good work :)

[Rita L. Sev]

Enjoyed reading this - there is really nothing like a puppy to bring joy!

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice photos and a fun poem to read. Animals give us hope and make us laugh. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote