The Puppies..

One morning,

when i stood behind

my window,

enjoying the cool breeze,

and the delicate morning sunshine,

I saw something

really fine,

which i'd simply

love to define....

I saw the puppies,

one and two and three and four,

all sitting

in front of my door..

One was white,

the other black,

one was brown,

and the other

white, with some black spots

over his body and head..

They looked lovely,

as all animal's kids normally do,

but it was 

their little faces, innocent eyes,

and tiny toes which made them

really sweet..

I couldn't stop,

seeing them from far,

so ran downstairs

to see them 

more clearly than from far..

but oh! i saw their mother,

standing beside those four,

filled with anger,

till her nose..

as if warning saying,

no need to come close..

Later that day,

when i saw their mother,

not present their anymore,

I went near them,

and saw them playing,

and some, even

biting each others toes..

I put some chapattis,

for them to eat,

but sadly, they couldn't,

as they didn't had teeth..

Each time when i 

went near them,

they came running to me,

licking my feet,

as if they waited for me

to play with them,

whenever i was free...

And being with them,

really made me pleased..

At evenings

when the children played,

these four eagerly ran behind them

to play,

and this at times,

made the kids

really afraid...

When children used to play

with the ball,

they grabbed it

in their little mouths and feet,

and passed it on to all...

and the game turned

even more interesting overall..

We named those four,

by four great names,

Jack, Joe, Peter, and Jane..

They hated chapattis,

but loved the candies,

that we fed them with,

again and again..

They enjoyed with us,

the most they could..

and we loved them all,

more than anyone else would..

Days passed, and they grew big,

but they are as great,

as they always stood,

even more than that, before they would

and much more than, a human ever would...

They guard our house,

in our absence

and detered unknown creatures 

from entering there..

Just some chapattis,and

sweet candies,

and our bond became

so strong and happy..

Lots of love,

to those little puppies

who taught us

how should a human be,

caring, lovely, sweet,and

above all,

the most faithful creature indeed... 

Author's Note

i hope you enjoyed reading this...
i would be really happy if you will review and rate it:)
regards,
saumya

Reviews

[Astro]

This is a gorgeous tale about puppies and the love that humans share with animals, dogs in particular. The beginning of your poem is really good, I was kind of sad when the rhyming disappeared but the story you describe in great imagery is solid and makes for a nice read. Grammatically, this is one of your better writes for sure. In this line the verb tense should be changed, "didn't had teeth.." to "didn't 'have' teeth.." and your use of the word "abstain" isn't really appropriate because it means 'stay away from' and not 'keep away from' which is more of what you were going for. I suggest: dissuade, discourage or deter maybe if you want to go even simpler, 'stop'.

All in all a very nice poem Saumya

[Saumya]

Thank you soo much Astro:) really glad you liked it:)

[TL Boehm]

puppies are wonderful critters. I've always had them in my life.

[Saumya]

yes.. i agree :) thanks a lot TL:)

[Dakshta]

This is such a sweet poem.. a few years ago my mother found some stray puppies, their mother was nowhere.. so we took care of them.. unfortunately some of them couldn't survive but those who are left still come in front of house everyday.. they play with us and are loyal towards us :)

[Saumya]

THANK YOU soo much dear..:) glad that you could relate:)

[♪Barklight♪]

Such a heartwarming little story about some of the most adorable little charracters X) this really made my day

[Saumya]

thank you:)
glad to know that:)

[Cassie]

wow!!!! such a nice story would have loved to see the puppies and I know i would have felt the same way, the picture of them below goes so well with the poem and now i would want a puppy just like one of those.

[Saumya]

thank you soo much Cassie..:) hope you can get some like them soon:)

[Mizo4]

Awwww sweet puppies rule.

[Saumya]

yeah..thanx:)

[Joyce S. Greene]

That little white puppy at the end had me from hello! What a wonderful poem. Your love for puppies and dogs shines in every word. You love them and I'm sure they love you back. Great job! Please stop by and say hello to me on my page. I'd love to hear from you.

[Saumya]

thanx Joyce:)

[Dayran]

Animals bring an unstinting sense of giving which is total ... they love to be a part of the things going on ... and they provide the foundation for our lives. For the human it is an equally important learning plan in life ... if the pet ever feels denied it goes into a panic of loss ... a person must handle them well and guide them into a stable self confidence. Nice write.

[Rosaria_V]

This is so adorable!! :) awesome job

[ANTO]

I think I got to know the not-so-little-now puppies very well from your poem Saumya. The moral of the story was loud and clear before I reached the last stanza - I particularly liked this;
"...they always stood,
even more than that, before they would
and much more than, a human ever would..." - because you have described precisely the loyalty of our canine pals as it is much greater than many humans sense of loyalty.
Well done!
Also you jumped to the head of my 'poems to review' list just by having thw word 'puppies' as the title. ;)

[Saumya]

thank you so much Anto:)

[dw817]

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Yep ! Puppies and dogs make great pets, however, they are a little too boisterous for me. I will always prefer the serene and scheming CAT. Some people say that cats are sneaky, evil, and cruel. This cannot be denied, however, they also have many other fine qualities as well ... :)