The Puppies..

The Puppies..

A Poem by Saumya

One morning,
when i stood behind
my window,
enjoying the cool breeze,
and the delicate morning sunshine,
I saw something
really fine,
which i'd simply
love to define....
I saw the puppies,
one and two and three and four,
all sitting
in front of my door..
One was white,
the other black,
one was brown,
and the other
white, with some black spots
over his body and head..
They looked lovely,
as all animal's kids normally do,
but it was 
their little faces, innocent eyes,
and tiny toes which made them
really sweet..
I couldn't stop,
seeing them from far,
so ran downstairs
to see them 
more clearly than from far..
but oh! i saw their mother,
standing beside those four,
filled with anger,
till her nose..
as if warning saying,
no need to come close..

Later that day,
when i saw their mother,
not present their anymore,
I went near them,
and saw them playing,
and some, even
biting each others toes..
I put some chapattis,
for them to eat,
but sadly, they couldn't,
as they didn't had teeth..

Each time when i 
went near them,
they came running to me,
licking my feet,
as if they waited for me
to play with them,
whenever i was free...
And being with them,
really made me pleased..

At evenings
when the children played,
these four eagerly ran behind them
to play,
and this at times,
made the kids
really afraid...

When children used to play
with the ball,
they grabbed it
in their little mouths and feet,
and passed it on to all...
and the game turned
even more interesting overall..

We named those four,
by four great names,
Jack, Joe, Peter, and Jane..
They hated chapattis,
but loved the candies,
that we fed them with,
again and again..

They enjoyed with us,
the most they could..
and we loved them all,
more than anyone else would..

Days passed, and they grew big,
but they are as great,
as they always stood,
even more than that, before they would
and much more than, a human ever would...

They guard our house,
in our absence
and detered unknown creatures 
from entering there..

Just some chapattis,and
sweet candies,
and our bond became
so strong and happy..

Lots of love,
to those little puppies
who taught us
how should a human be,
caring, lovely, sweet,and
above all,
the most faithful creature indeed... 


© 2013 Saumya


Author's Note

Saumya
i hope you enjoyed reading this...
i would be really happy if you will review and rate it:)
regards,
saumya

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This is a gorgeous tale about puppies and the love that humans share with animals, dogs in particular. The beginning of your poem is really good, I was kind of sad when the rhyming disappeared but the story you describe in great imagery is solid and makes for a nice read. Grammatically, this is one of your better writes for sure. In this line the verb tense should be changed, "didn't had teeth.." to "didn't 'have' teeth.." and your use of the word "abstain" isn't really appropriate because it means 'stay away from' and not 'keep away from' which is more of what you were going for. I suggest: dissuade, discourage or deter maybe if you want to go even simpler, 'stop'.

All in all a very nice poem Saumya

Posted 11 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Saumya

11 Years Ago

Thank you soo much Astro:) really glad you liked it:)



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shoooo cute as puppies.... lovely tale written v.well......:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Saumya

11 Years Ago

thanx Lily:)
If only humans had the innocence and kindness that puppies do , the world would be a much better place .

Posted 11 Years Ago


Such an adorable piece...beautifully penned...loved the pictures too...hugss

Posted 11 Years Ago


Saumya

11 Years Ago

thanx Rose...:) a grand hug to you too:)
Great imagery, adorable puppy tale.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Saumya

11 Years Ago

thanx Frieda:)
Frieda P

11 Years Ago

My pleasure, it made me smile :-)
love this probably cos i love animals they teach true love true loyalty and they live their lives with a humbleness most men cannot muster

Posted 11 Years Ago


adorable tale, saumya.. I wish my mood was better to enjoy the impact of your poem, but it is not. Lovely though.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Omg this is an awesome poem please written more

Posted 11 Years Ago


Saumya

11 Years Ago

thanx Felicity:)
It made a good read, well done!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Saumya

11 Years Ago

thank you dear:)
You can tell a lot about a person through their compassion for an animal. This truly warms the heart, Saumya!

My best,
Kelly

Posted 11 Years Ago


Saumya

11 Years Ago

hank you kelly:)
What a sweet write....wtih a great life lesson. People can learn a lot about loyalty and how to treat others by the way these puppies reacted to your kindness. Lovely to read. Lydi**

Posted 11 Years Ago


Saumya

11 Years Ago

thank you so much dear:)

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