The Puppies..

One morning,

when i stood behind

my window,

enjoying the cool breeze,

and the delicate morning sunshine,

I saw something

really fine,

which i'd simply

love to define....

I saw the puppies,

one and two and three and four,

all sitting

in front of my door..

One was white,

the other black,

one was brown,

and the other

white, with some black spots

over his body and head..

They looked lovely,

as all animal's kids normally do,

but it was 

their little faces, innocent eyes,

and tiny toes which made them

really sweet..

I couldn't stop,

seeing them from far,

so ran downstairs

to see them 

more clearly than from far..

but oh! i saw their mother,

standing beside those four,

filled with anger,

till her nose..

as if warning saying,

no need to come close..

Later that day,

when i saw their mother,

not present their anymore,

I went near them,

and saw them playing,

and some, even

biting each others toes..

I put some chapattis,

for them to eat,

but sadly, they couldn't,

as they didn't had teeth..

Each time when i 

went near them,

they came running to me,

licking my feet,

as if they waited for me

to play with them,

whenever i was free...

And being with them,

really made me pleased..

At evenings

when the children played,

these four eagerly ran behind them

to play,

and this at times,

made the kids

really afraid...

When children used to play

with the ball,

they grabbed it

in their little mouths and feet,

and passed it on to all...

and the game turned

even more interesting overall..

We named those four,

by four great names,

Jack, Joe, Peter, and Jane..

They hated chapattis,

but loved the candies,

that we fed them with,

again and again..

They enjoyed with us,

the most they could..

and we loved them all,

more than anyone else would..

Days passed, and they grew big,

but they are as great,

as they always stood,

even more than that, before they would

and much more than, a human ever would...

They guard our house,

in our absence

and detered unknown creatures 

from entering there..

Just some chapattis,and

sweet candies,

and our bond became

so strong and happy..

Lots of love,

to those little puppies

who taught us

how should a human be,

caring, lovely, sweet,and

above all,

the most faithful creature indeed... 

Author's Note

i hope you enjoyed reading this...
i would be really happy if you will review and rate it:)
regards,
saumya

Reviews

[Astro]

This is a gorgeous tale about puppies and the love that humans share with animals, dogs in particular. The beginning of your poem is really good, I was kind of sad when the rhyming disappeared but the story you describe in great imagery is solid and makes for a nice read. Grammatically, this is one of your better writes for sure. In this line the verb tense should be changed, "didn't had teeth.." to "didn't 'have' teeth.." and your use of the word "abstain" isn't really appropriate because it means 'stay away from' and not 'keep away from' which is more of what you were going for. I suggest: dissuade, discourage or deter maybe if you want to go even simpler, 'stop'.

All in all a very nice poem Saumya

[Saumya]

Thank you soo much Astro:) really glad you liked it:)

[barleygirl]

This is a nicely lengthy story in a poem! I'm amazed at how the storytelling is actually the best part, with so many details that are easy to visualize. Your writing has a frisky quality that reminds me of a youthful & eager puppy, bouncing & playing. Even tho I love puppies, & you've shown us how lovable they can be . . . I prefer older dogs that don't chew up everything! *wink! wink!* (((HUGS)))

[Saumya]

Hehe..:)
Thank you for your kind words, dear:) I'm glad you liked and enjoyed the piece :)read moreHehe..:)
Thank you for your kind words, dear:) I'm glad you liked and enjoyed the piece :)

-Saumya

[Fréyjä Helv..]

It definitely is a cute poem, although we kinda get lost in the rhyming that actually works but maybe you need to read more books to make it more interesting, if you know what I mean. Don't be afraid to learn new vocabularies that could make your poem much more convincing. There some slight grammatical errors which you can easily work on. But what actually got people to love your poem is it's subject, which is puppies and their story. Good work

[Tom]

Marvelous ! I know exactly where you're coming from and so nice to know your puppies are still with you and all part of one big happy family, the way it should be ! We can all learn so much from dogs and your splendid poem highlights this so well !

[Bridget Mcmaken]

It's a very cute poem. And very well written. I just love this!

[ZeniaK]

When I went to your profile, I clicked on this because who wouldn't click on a poem about puppies?! And I'm so glad I did click on it, because it is so cute and I absolutely loved it! I love poems that are uplifting or happy like this one, and this made my day.

[Saumya]

wow...feeling very very happy to know that my friend:)thank you for the lovely review, n i hope you enjoy my other writes too:)

[topsyturvy]

Waaaa so adorable and they really are faithful creatures indeed :)

[CBH]

Is this based off of a true story? Just the way that it is written it sounds true. I love the pictures! I love puppies too! What is chapattis, though? Never heard of it.💟

[Brandon]

Reading this really started my morning in a positive way. I adore puppies, I felt like I wanted to be there physically in the poem. Thank you for sharing. You are very talented:)

[Saumya]

thank you so much Brandom:)

[Ankit Mahar]

Very beautiful poem .I really enjpyed this poem . Keep writing

[mark]

very sweet poem about 4 puppies.
Great story line you had as well.
I enjoyed reading it, it was a great write.
It is a bit too long for a poem though but it was great.
well done :)

[Saumya]

thank you:)

[mark]

you're welcome :)