The use of brown color has a great impact on the poem :)
The picture is really nice :)
I completely agree with you :)
Our thoughts make our inner voice :)
Some has bad thoughts and some has good...
we all fight with it everyday :)
You showed us real path to walk through...
Saumya oyur writing skills are increasing day by day...
am glad about that :)
Keep writing dear!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thank you for the really great review....:) and its great to knw, that my writings improving..will w.. read morethank you for the really great review....:) and its great to knw, that my writings improving..will work more on it... thank u once again:)
Again sticking with the positive writing which is refreshing Saumya, but I would like to see you employ more figures of speech to your writing for dramatic effect. Most of your work seems like motivational dialogue.
As to editing: You don't need to pluralize in these lines after the words "each" and "every", "in each resolutions we make,
in every decisions we take,"
The use of color separating parts of your speech might seem beautiful, but it distracts a bit to the reader because it almost seems like there is a separate dialogue, but there isn't it's just a continuation of the previous thought. Overall, for someone who wasn't brought up speaking English, this is still very nice, especially in sentiment(as your work normally is). Although, I tend to disagree slightly with your analysis of trusting our inner voices, because if you were ever afflicted by addiction, you would know that sometimes that same inner voice can become corrupted and drive you to do destructive things that otherwise you would stay away from, but I'll chalk that up to you being young and less familiar with that aspect of the inner voice. Keep writing your outlook is always refreshing.
Our Inner Voice helps us make the better choice. Psychologist call it the Super Ego. Our Super Ego develops in childhood depending on how we're brought up by our parents and culture.
The use of brown color has a great impact on the poem :)
The picture is really nice :)
I completely agree with you :)
Our thoughts make our inner voice :)
Some has bad thoughts and some has good...
we all fight with it everyday :)
You showed us real path to walk through...
Saumya oyur writing skills are increasing day by day...
am glad about that :)
Keep writing dear!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
thank you for the really great review....:) and its great to knw, that my writings improving..will w.. read morethank you for the really great review....:) and its great to knw, that my writings improving..will work more on it... thank u once again:)
Hi all:)
this is me....Saumya
well, i don't have much to tell you all about me..
but yes to start with,
I love writing & painting.(you can find some of my paintings in the "my photos" section of.. more..