If You...

If You...

A Poem by Saumya

If you  want to be something,
be like a TREE,
which is always.....
GIVING

If you want to be something,
be like a FLOWER,
which is always........
SMILING

If you want to be something,
be like a FOUNTAIN,
which is always...........CONSISTENTLY TOILING

If you want to be something,
be like a COOL BREEZE
which is always..........PLEASING and SOOTHING

If you want to be something,
be like a great FABLE
which is always..........INTERESTING

If you want to be something,
be like a S
TAR
which is always..............SHINING


If you want to be something,
be like SKY
which is always.............WITHOUT ENDING

If you want to be something,
be like an ANGEL from God
which is always..............FORGIVING, LOVING, and BLESSING

But yes, my friends,
if you want to be one of these,
which i had been mentioning......

you first need, to be a good
human being...
who is really essential, to
make the atmosphere
around........
serene

so make your world,
something really amazing,
by .......supplying it with great meanings.
from your surroundings.

and be the change,
you and your heart,
had always been ...dreaming..!!

© 2013 Saumya


Author's Note

Saumya
thanks a lot for reading...!!
i will be rally grateful, if you review and rate it..!!
regards
saumya

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Again your faith shines through. The analogies (I think I've chosen the right word) are precise and instantly visual -- all symbols available to everyone and thus easy to mimic the benign influences. Your use of colored text keeps the reader's eye interested. Your gentle spirituality should be bottled and distributed worldwide. The last stanzas sweep the reader up into the thrilling realization that the answer is to change, to be part of the change. Inspirational for any religion and inspirational for a free spirit.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Again your faith shines through. The analogies (I think I've chosen the right word) are precise and instantly visual -- all symbols available to everyone and thus easy to mimic the benign influences. Your use of colored text keeps the reader's eye interested. Your gentle spirituality should be bottled and distributed worldwide. The last stanzas sweep the reader up into the thrilling realization that the answer is to change, to be part of the change. Inspirational for any religion and inspirational for a free spirit.

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

An intelligent and spiritual array of observation. Well done.

Posted 11 Years Ago


The poem is amazing. I loved your use of examples. Using nature to make your point allowed the reader to grasp the meaning and have good vision.
"you first need, to be a good
human being...
who is really essential, to
make the atmosphere
around........
serene"
Thank you for the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 11 Years Ago


Good poem.....nice message......well written !!!!

Posted 11 Years Ago


As always you've delivered an upbeat and heartfelt message. Your form is improving. The sentence structure was much better on this one. Great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


Those are good things to be

Posted 11 Years Ago


The formation of your sentences is really good in this one Saumya. The message is also, well thought out with interesting similes and an overall beautiful message.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Amen a thousand times. A good human being is all one should aim for and nothing more ... Beautiful poem.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Notable message well presented. TFS

Posted 11 Years Ago


Every stanza poses a thoughtful sentiment...I really like the images you provide for each scenario...nicely done :)

Posted 11 Years Ago



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