The Journey Of Life...

just a simple attempt to vividly look towards life...

Have you trailed through, the

storms of life..?
If no, then i will  take you there,
in the meanwhile..!

It is a journey, of infinite miles,
but  starts with a single step,
that will take you to that
world ahead..!

so, come out of your room
or house,
and get in a garden,
near your house....

Look at the beauty, over there,
observe everything deeply there......

now, if you see a butterfly,
and get that lovely smile on your face,
I'll  simply smile and tell you that,
this is how, we meet friends in our life;
who make our lives, full of surprise..!!

Now step towards a place, with
high mountains, and look at them,
this is the height, at which our aims lie,
but remember,
you always have, one way,
or the other, to reach there,
it may be  risky, and harsh,
but one day, it will lead
you to the top...!

Now, come to a place,
where needy live;
and intensely see a poor child,
I bet, you'll clearly understand,
what is  being deprived;
see their faces, and health,
and you'll know,
what is hell..!!
and this is why, we really need to help........

Now, step back to that garden,
and see if there's a rose plant;
forget every thing for a while,
and sit there, with a keen understanding,
as, here, I'll tell you something, reallly interesting,..!

first look at the stem,
long and green,
this resembles the passage of life, for
we human beings....!!
then look at the thorns,
these are  like those obstacles,
we face in life..!!
now, finally look at the flower so bright,
which is the grand result of, HOPE, STRUGGGLE, and strive...
these are the things, that literally make the flower  .....bright...!!!

And this is the process,
which we call as  LIFE.....!!
which is a journey,
of endless miles,
but really filled with delight,
which i hope,
you really enjoyed...!!!

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"The Journey Of Life"
Saumya,
The message which was real for me in reading this poem was 'stop and smell the roses.' The paddling speed at which our thoughts twirl is not conductive to pondering and finding appreciation in the day to day blessings that are all around us. The above words were an encouragement to do so, to be still and soak up good things.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Saumya]

Thanks a lot, dear Kathy! I'm indeed very glad that you liked the message of this poem :)
(((Hugs)))

Fondly,
Saumya.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Saumya,
Life is so full beyond measure. Plenty of challenges for us all. I love ponder-poems like this one of yours. Stay well.
Blessings,
Kathy

[JordanIsaacSmith]

Another good poem. Good metaphores and analogies, very well written. My only criticism would be your use of ellipsis. Only three dots are required, no more.

[Tejas]

Very nice analogies and said very simply. A good combination.

[sanya]

this is an example of excellence toooo good

[InsanityWriter]

Wonderful poem! It's great to read your work. :)

[annie lee]

This is a lovely poem; I visualize you leading the reader by the hand, and introducing him to the wonders, great and small, of the world. I see you explaining intricacies, failings, needs and compassion. I see you drawing the infinitely detailed map that connects each and every one of us to one other, to life, to the planet. This is the key to realizing we are all spirit creatures and life is our song.

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a lovely journey that you've taken your readers on. Indeed there is much in the world that we need to see and gain wisdom about. Nice analogy of the rose. My only suggestions are to reword some of the cliches to give them a unique meaning of their own and to tighten some of the stanzas by omitting words that aren't necessary. All in all, a very nice poem.

[Caradoc]

Whoa. This is an awesome piece. You've demonstrated a profound knowledge of life and the trials that human beings face.

This is easily a new favorite of mine.

Bravo.

-Caradoc

[Cascara (aka Sprint Goe..]

i love you managed to take ME on a nice little journey with your optimistic words!

whenever a reader feels transported into another place, that's definitely a compliment :D

[Saumya]

oh....thank you so much dear, for enjoying this journey, through my words and thoughts....!!!!!!
read moreoh....thank you so much dear, for enjoying this journey, through my words and thoughts....!!!!!!
feeling reallly great, that you liked it.....
a big thanks for the lovely review...!!!

take care...

with best wishes,
saumya

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the logic of the poem. Need to get out of the house and see the world around you. I like the description of the world in the poem. There is good and bad to see. Maybe we can make the world a better place. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Saumya]

thanks a lot, dear sir, for the lovely review..!!
:)

[Phantom Heart]

I love that you are so insightful. I like that you think about things in life that actually make up life rather than material things. I have been to places and have seen poverty and I have been to places were it was so lavishing that I was afraid to sit on an ornate sofa. I can relate to this. My favorite lines..."
Look at the beauty, over there,
observe everything deeply there......
Thanks for writing.

[Saumya]

thank you soooo much for the lovely review...!!!
reallly glad you liked it, and could relate..!!
:))