The Journey Of Life...

just a simple attempt to vividly look towards life...

Have you trailed through, the

storms of life..?
If no, then i will  take you there,
in the meanwhile..!

It is a journey, of infinite miles,
but  starts with a single step,
that will take you to that
world ahead..!

so, come out of your room
or house,
and get in a garden,
near your house....

Look at the beauty, over there,
observe everything deeply there......

now, if you see a butterfly,
and get that lovely smile on your face,
I'll  simply smile and tell you that,
this is how, we meet friends in our life;
who make our lives, full of surprise..!!

Now step towards a place, with
high mountains, and look at them,
this is the height, at which our aims lie,
but remember,
you always have, one way,
or the other, to reach there,
it may be  risky, and harsh,
but one day, it will lead
you to the top...!

Now, come to a place,
where needy live;
and intensely see a poor child,
I bet, you'll clearly understand,
what is  being deprived;
see their faces, and health,
and you'll know,
what is hell..!!
and this is why, we really need to help........

Now, step back to that garden,
and see if there's a rose plant;
forget every thing for a while,
and sit there, with a keen understanding,
as, here, I'll tell you something, reallly interesting,..!

first look at the stem,
long and green,
this resembles the passage of life, for
we human beings....!!
then look at the thorns,
these are  like those obstacles,
we face in life..!!
now, finally look at the flower so bright,
which is the grand result of, HOPE, STRUGGGLE, and strive...
these are the things, that literally make the flower  .....bright...!!!

And this is the process,
which we call as  LIFE.....!!
which is a journey,
of endless miles,
but really filled with delight,
which i hope,
you really enjoyed...!!!

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

"The Journey Of Life"
Saumya,
The message which was real for me in reading this poem was 'stop and smell the roses.' The paddling speed at which our thoughts twirl is not conductive to pondering and finding appreciation in the day to day blessings that are all around us. The above words were an encouragement to do so, to be still and soak up good things.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Saumya]

Thanks a lot, dear Kathy! I'm indeed very glad that you liked the message of this poem :)
(((Hugs)))

Fondly,
Saumya.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Saumya,
Life is so full beyond measure. Plenty of challenges for us all. I love ponder-poems like this one of yours. Stay well.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Jon Roggie]

Great insight with the rose bush. Life is full of beauty, but the thorns are also a part. Well written.

[Astro]

Again in this poem I can see the keen eye behind the words that sees life as a whole, a journey fraught with danger and delight. You have a unique way of using punctuation that I think would make more sense if I heard your poem being read aloud. That does not make it too difficult to understand though. The last two sections of your poem are very well written and make for a nice ending. On the editing side, there are some issues with wording and a bit with grammar to work on, but overall good job. A couple of spots to look at are:
" which we call as LIFE.....!!" this would sound better as "which we call...Life!"
"which is the grand result of, HOPE, STRUGGGLE, and strive..." where "strive" should be 'strife'

[SteveB]

The joy is in the journey. I liiked the analogy of the rose.Well thought out. Thank you

[Roopal]

i loved the part where you compare rose to life. really interesting. you have a good imagination i must say. :)

[Saumya]

thank you for the lovely compliment, and the sweet review..!!
:)

[Kristin Lee]

Yes, life is all about the journey. Very interesting write. I like how you pull the reader out of their house into another environment. That's unique.

[~*~Peace Keeper~*~]

I liked how you described life as a rose, something that hurts so much yet can turn out to be something so beautiful.

Good Job

[Tomahawk Joe]

great poem good analagy

[Criss ;)]

It is a journey, of infinite miles,
but starts with a single step,
that will take you to that
world ahead..!

so, come out of your room
or house,
and get in a garden,
near your house....
this's great one...have this 98.9/100 :)

[Saumya]

thank you sooooooooooo much my dear friend, once again.....!!!
its really great that you mentioned the two stanzas, that you loved to read...!!!!
and thanks a lot for the rating....!!!!
:) :) :) :)

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

This is a great write...
you have a great understanding of emotions and making sense of them...

a delight to read :)

[Saumya]

thank you soooooooooooooooooooo much my dear friend, for the huge appreciation,
and a big thanks for that lovely compliment....!!!!!
reallly wonderful to know you liked it..... :)
take care....
regards,
saumya
:)

[smilempsn]

The Journey of life....hmm everyone has his/her own route of passing this passage to reach the destination of LIFE....!!

You presented yours one is so inspirational.. nice work :)
ThankU for the read request..

[Saumya]

thank you sooooo much, for the great appreciative review...!!!!
good to know, you liked it...!!!!
:)