This is a poem with a wise message. If could use a little more rhythm. I wrote two verses that you may keep for your self to show you what I mean by more rhythm. I overlapped the rhyme using a seven syllable line followed by a five syllable line where all accents match in meter. This may be sung as a song:
Heart
When there's trouble in your life
just take a deep sigh.
Medication for your strife
may be found nearby.
Your best guide is deep inside,
an eternal tie,
where no truths may ever hide.
Just ask your heart why.
take comfort in what brings you relief my dear poet, and know that asking one's heart is the source of enlightenment. terrific write!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you sooooo much for the appreciative review...!!!
really happy that you liked it....!!read morethank you sooooo much for the appreciative review...!!!
really happy that you liked it....!!
:)
You offer wise advise and words of praise to God!! This is lovely and is certainly an encouragement to me to love and serve Him as best as I can by sharing the gifts He has given mankind!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thank you sooo much dear, for the lovely review....!!!
:)
A moving piece...Everybody can relate to it :)
It teaches you in some way and gives you inspiration also:)
Heart is way stronger than brain...when brain stops only heart is there for you always :)
I loved this poem :)
Keep writing !!
Your Friend
Akshat
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
thanks a lot for the appreciating review......!!!
:)
I listen to my heart but somehow it gets me into trouble. Don't know why God wants me into get into trouble. Nicely penned and gives a lot of hope. Cheers!!
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
cheers to you too..!! :)
always have a deep faith in your heart, because, whatever it says, is.. read morecheers to you too..!! :)
always have a deep faith in your heart, because, whatever it says, is always for your best...!!
try it and you will understand..!! :)
take care.....
saumya
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