This is a poem with a wise message. If could use a little more rhythm. I wrote two verses that you may keep for your self to show you what I mean by more rhythm. I overlapped the rhyme using a seven syllable line followed by a five syllable line where all accents match in meter. This may be sung as a song:
Heart
When there's trouble in your life
just take a deep sigh.
Medication for your strife
may be found nearby.
Your best guide is deep inside,
an eternal tie,
where no truths may ever hide.
Just ask your heart why.
I have always considered the loving power of "GOD" (whatever each person may call him/her/it) to be something that resides within each of us & we connect to each other by listening to this inner voice, this inner spirit, which speaks the same language, the language of love. Here you have found a way to make this into a working model of how it goes, using specific instructions to help those who are not aware of this inner love guidance, or those who aren't in the habit of listening to it. I love it when a writer conveys a special spiritual message but makes it feel like an everyday part of life, something we can rely on all the time, not just when we are praying or going to church. I always enjoy the way you impart your life lessons in a way that does not ever feel preachy (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
"Ask Your Heart"
Saumya,
The heart is truly of seat of humanity. We assimilate life's important things there. Whereas the mind is the place which the tactical issues of life take place.
Your poem is a kind and nurturing word to the painful and perplexing state of the world and how these things try our HEARTS.
thank you for a lovely poem.
Kathy.
Nice one Saumya ... its simple, naive and perhaps even blind to any other possibility but it communicates the infancy of the heart in a maturity we are just coming to as a human community. In that in reminds us of the elegance we experienced in a time gone past when things were a whole lot uncomplicated. Pat on back ...
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