this is a letter to GOD, on behalf of all human beings to show our love and concern for him..and ask some important question regarding the life today
O God, you are the one, closest to our hearts...!! our Angel in pain, and redeemer in life's game; without whom, living this life, for us, is in vain..!!
You, are the one, who knows, everything about us, therefore, in real, you only, are our best friend. The one, who carefully listens to us, and, puts us away, from, Life's TENSIONS, by showering, rays of innocence, and diligence..!
O GOD, my friend, everyone changes with the trend; but you are the one, always with us, like a great friend..!!
I ask, you answer; i pray, you cherish; i am defeated, you console me, i am hopeless, you give me hope, i am rejected, you give me the ways, how my real talents can be showcased.. All of which, that, only a best friend, and parents, in this world, do for their children, and friend.. therefore, you are a fine blend ,of parents and friends; whom, these mere words, can't afford to define, as,YOU and your powers are immense.....!!!
But, my dear friend, i write this letter to you today, to ask ,some common questions, which is perturbing human beings today; they are the ones, whose answers seems, uncertain, so, my friend, i hope, you can surely answer these, then.....
why are the poor, being rejected, and the rich upgraded......?????? why are the girls, in our society, physically defeated, and ill-treated by men......????? why can't children, care , for their older parents..??? Why is corruption, in this world so prevalent..??? Will peace, come to this world again.??
and most importantly.................
Will the world, really end....!!?
O God, these are some questions, which make, we humans, disillusioned; Therefore, answering these for you is really important; because, we consider you as our dearest friend, so, i know, you will definitely calm our curiosity, by answering these questions..
At last, I'd like to thank you ,my friend, for, patiently, listening to the pathetic condition ' of we humans, who are really disturbed, by these dreadful conditions, and hope, that you will shortly answer these question..
To conclude this, I'd say, that, o God, we human beings really adore you, urge you to take care, wish you a calm goodbye, and heartly wish, that, may your glory always, gleam in heaven...!!
this is lovely and sweet. i think we all need to step back and appreciate the blessings that we have even when we question them or are unsure. my only criticism recurring in your work is that your punctuation is distracting. you don't need to use so many !!!!!! or ?????? one will usually suffice, maybe two to get a point across. otherwise- your messages are incredibly positive and your outlook on life is so refreshing. great work!
It is great poem as the questions you have raised hold lot of truth. Yes, god is our creator though still so much suffering exists. Even I do not have answer to that. Still, very nicely written verses and loved reading them.
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11 Years Ago
thank you so much for the lovely review...!!!
glad that you could relate..!!
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this is lovely and sweet. i think we all need to step back and appreciate the blessings that we have even when we question them or are unsure. my only criticism recurring in your work is that your punctuation is distracting. you don't need to use so many !!!!!! or ?????? one will usually suffice, maybe two to get a point across. otherwise- your messages are incredibly positive and your outlook on life is so refreshing. great work!
Even in its questioning parts, there is a sweet innocence to this...it's like writing to Santa Claus when we were children...we see a lot of pictures of him, and meet a lot of people claiming to be him, yet we're told not be around when the real one appears...but when we wake up in the morning and scurry down the stairs, we see that he was there, and left gifts in his place...I don't open up spiritually on here very often, but this piece did compel me to get these thoughts out...it is a lovely piece :)
An interesting letter to God, showing your devotion to Him/Her. On the one side, as a believer I would say that the ending in particular is confusing. You are saying that you wish a "calm goodbye and to take care" but then you go on to say you hope that "God's glory will live always in heaven". Also, calling the Creator of all life and everything around it a "friend" or "parent" might not sit well with certain readers, but many people view their God as such. On the other side, for the non-believers, some people might be a little offended that you would say that you are speaking on behalf of "all human beings". Another point, is that you say you ask and God answers but then you go on to ask a bunch of questions pleading for Him/Her to answer. A non-believer would laugh at this thought. P.S. They would also be the most rocked if He/She did answer.
I can tell you are an amazing person with a special heart...
love the poem :D
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
oh, thats soo sweet of you,
thank yo soo much for the lovely compliment ....!!!
glad you.. read moreoh, thats soo sweet of you,
thank yo soo much for the lovely compliment ....!!!
glad you liked it...!!! :))
You are a very caring loving person with a big heart and a beautiful one too...Rose
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
oh thats sooooooooooo sweet of you my dear friend that you feel so good about me...!!!
really .. read moreoh thats sooooooooooo sweet of you my dear friend that you feel so good about me...!!!
really good to know that :)
and thank you for the lovely review..!!!
:)
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