MY GRANNY,MY LIFE.....

A real story of intense love between a granny and her granddaughter, and the pain of the granddaughter on losing her....

Once, there were days, I used to play;
Once, there was someone, in whose lap,I used to lay;
Once, I was gifted ,with every great gifts of GOD, that,
one strives for;
Once, I hadn't to fear; because,  someone, very dear to me;
was always with me, to take care;
Once, there were days, I needn't bother,
because I  had someone, sweeter than a brother

Once, there was someone,
who understood, all my emotions;
and she, had an immense perception...
Once, GOD gifted me,his best Angel;
she was no one other, than, :
 "MY GRANDMOTHER"

And, how sweet!! it is, to tell you,
my dear readers and friends...; that :
' if i am here today, its all because of her..,
Even today, I wonder, that what was
in her so stronger; that..:
i never had to explain, and she,
clearly perceived my pain...

To me, she was something, more than a mother;
And, I think, thats why,GOD made her,
my GRANDMOTHER;
I enjoyed with her, the most I could;
To me, she was someone, sweeterthah Kids.....

My day started, seeing her;
and , it ended,  sleeping with her..
I loved  her stories;
and, liked her night rhymes,
for me, with her, these , were..;
"The best times".....!!

Days passed, and she grew older;
Gone were the Cuteness, and seen was Dullness;
Gone were the Chubby cheeks , and seen was the Wrinkled Face of hers;
But something, that was still t he same, was;
The Love, Care, and Concern  for her,
Granddaughter.........!!

Honestly, to tell you;
No one in my life, Loved and Cared for me,
As she could....!!!!

Then, came the day, describing which,
My eyes get  filled with pain;
GOD, almighty ,called her angel, back to heaven;
and I in this confusing world was left, all alone;
NO ONE, to PERCEPT me..;
NO ONE , to SHARE  my feelings with...;
NO ONE, to FEEL the pain of my sufferings; and,
NO ONE , to SLEEP and LISTEN STORIES with;....

O, GOD, almighty, I'd really like to thank you...;
for gifting, such a lovely Angel of yours;
who has taught me a great moral, by her detachment, that:
"BIRTH and DEATH are, two basic truths of human life,
One who has come, has to go, and, GOD too, needs,
good people to be with him....."!!

O my  lovely Granny,  may you be safe,
wherever you are, and if, you can see and hear me,
I'd like to tell you, that:
"I LOVE YOU, I LOVE YOU, and I LOVE YOU".....
and here on this earth, Iam totally, incomplete without you, and;
I really MISS YOU.....!!!!!!!!
 

Reviews

[kublakhan27]

This is an emotional experience for sure...like many that have already read it, I share the same feelings...I'm not sure if I've ever recovered from losing my own grandmother, but like you, I've never felt a sense of total loss...a very sweet and heartfelt write :)

[Prritiy]

its so touching to see the bond you shared with your angel grandmother.

you have written it nicely.

[Patrick O'Neil]

Realy good dedication to a special person. It makes me recall my own grandmother. I like the rhyme and the descriptive words raped in basic truth.

[Diane Lockard]

I am glad you had your Grandmother to show you the way, and to able to share your time and thoughts with her. It is wonderful for both, and I am fortunate to be here for my granddaughter and have her be part of my life too...

[She With Eyes Like Unsh..]

This made me really stop. I can connect with you on a certain level with this, because my grandmother suffered a stroke, and even though she lives with us now, it feels at time that I have indeed lost her.

[s y e]

I love my Gran to pieces, she is my whole world and the thought of losing her is unbearable. I've told her many times she can't leave me, haha. I know we have no control over death or anything but I still tell her. I loved her tons and I can totally feel your pain in this write.

I do think you need to write in proper English, not text speak. So I'd clean up your grammar and punctuation. Other than that it's great.

~ Noodle. ★

[Dana Alsamsam]

The emotion here is lovely and i feel your pain and loss! I think you could clean up some things language wise or grammatically- if you want specifics, feel free to comment and i can point some out! keep on writing, you're on your way in the right direction.

[Avinash]

the selfless love we receive is the purest and divinely magical, does not happen no matter how hard we wish for it at least can always cherish and remember.

[Astro]

Well Saumya dear, it is evident that your Grandmother meant a lot to you. This is a very nice ode to her. There are still quite a few grammatical errors that you could work on though. I will give you a few:
"Once, I hadn't to fear; " Usually we would say "Once, I had nothing to fear."
"Once, I was gifted ,with every great gifts of GOD, that,
one strives for;" in this sentence you wouldn't say, "with every great gifts" you could say, "with many great gifts 'from' God" or " with a great gift 'from' God" Also, one does not 'strive' for gifts, you could say "that anyone could 'wish' for" that would be more appropriate.
"Gone were the Cuteness, and seen was Dullness;" you could say, "Gone 'was' the cuteness and replaced instead was a dullness."
"NO ONE, to PERCEPT me..;" here the word 'percept' is incorrect in two ways: 1. percept is not actually a word, the word you were looking for is 'perceive' 2. The more accurate term I think you are looking for is 'understand' "No one to understand me..." I hope this helps a bit, keep working on your English the emotion is great.