Stars

A starry night for you and I

The stars are everywhere,

and the night is long.

Let us all make a wish,

and take a slowly, lovely walk.

They're shining so bright,

sparkles filling my eyes.

And I have a urging feeling in my mind,

to put out my small hand,

and keep it forever within my reach.

Just a starry night for you and me.

The remembered Moon is staring down, 

lighting up what the lamps could not.

Shading a cast over everyone,

denting the streets into curving highways,

and forming the people into creatures of night.

I imagined us sitting upon the moon,

sleeping on it's soft white dust.

Naming thousands of stars, 

and watching colorful comets fly around.

I imagined us going back in time,

and walking on aged, cobblestoned streets. 

Greeting everyone that passed by,

and waltzing back and forth in the grand ball.

I imagined us together;

walking towards the orange sunset.

Gritty sand under our feet,

wringing between our bare toes. 

Our first kiss below the cold, blue water.

I imagined us as crushes.

A flower looming right before a locker,

with a pink note,

barely legible writing.

Young, and vulnerable,

just how we love it.

Author's Note

=) I still believe in wishes on stars.

Reviews

[Erinne S.]

This is beautiful! I loved the descriptions and imagery in this, I could picture everything you were portraying.

"lighting up the what the lamps could not." In this line you need to take out "the" before 'what' My only critique of the piece.

Great job!

~Erinne

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww, so cute! It has that dreamy and longing feel. i love it so much. I definately love the imagery here. =D Very well done. I can see it in my mind as I read.
And I, too, love to wish on the stars at night. =)

[Coyote Poetry]

A nice poem with some good dreams and desires. The first step in anything is to dream it and go find it in the second step. I like the flow and the description in this poem.
"Naming thousands of stars,
and watching colorful comets fly around."
A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Darius]

I LOVE THIS POEMMM! its really fantastic :D u r a skilled writer!!!!!!!!!

[roy mccarthy]

this is an awesome poem,
dreamy,fantasy style!
great write!

[Alicia Hirshey]

This was amazing. I wish upon a star every night. It brings back the feeling of happiness that I had as a child. I love this poem so much.

[I Am Svetlana]

I really really liked the imagery in this piece. It's wonderful. I think we all should believe in wishing upon a star, it would help us out every now and then. With wishing on a star, we would feel safer and less alone. The sparkle and shine would be a sign that the star had recieved our wish and is working on making it come true for us. We just have to wait and be patient.

[mi-chan]

aww, so cute! XD i love the description and the sense of innocence portrayed in this poem. i especially loved the last stanza:

"I imagined us as crushes.
A flower looming right before a locker,
with a pink note,
barely legible writing.
Young, and vulnerable,
just how we love it."

very nice ^^

[shoaib]

awesome writing .. really like this

[Vanessa Rico]

Me too! I love to wish upon the stars when no one is looking! Like Erinne said, Great Job!!

[Kelly M.]

Beautiful and great pictures of imaginary I got from this! It was positively lovely, sweet, and happy with a lyrical touch! I loved it! Great write!! :D