Dreams

   Still dreaming, I am. 

Still in the dawn of the sun, looking over the horizon,

   Always at the rim, ready to tumble down.

For someone to come, and catch you while you drop..

   Tell the clouds to send kisses, and by night, it will rain. 

Tell the sun to shine, and by morning it will light.

   Like a match in a forest, it spreads without notice, 

but in the clear of day, it will spring into desire.

   Desire to love, hold, and be.

Broken hearts resemble pieces of mirrored glass.

   Once made in a smooth, and glorifying beauty;

then fragile, and tempting sins, will bring it's last.

   Make it snow, so the heavens can send kisses.

Let the wind blow, and revive the messages.

   The love letters, written by the heart;

turn into wicked words, that ruin our thoughts.

   The magic that skips around, and makes a song.

A sad love story, and a tragic once beloved.

   Chapters of dark scribbles, and unknown words.

Starts off with pink lovely hearts,

   but ends with knives that lock apart. 

Look at the stars, they will tell you.

   Of the hopeful boy and girl,

who believed in fantasies..

Author's Note

Hope you liked it!

Reviews

[mi-chan]

this was really beautiful! i loved the flow and descriptions, especially:

"Tell the clouds to send kisses, and by night, it will rain.
Tell the sun to shine, and by morning it will light.
Like a match in a forest, it spreads without notice,
but in the clear of day, it will spring into desire.
Desire to love, hold, and be."

Really well done =)

[knowman]

I really like the content of this poem.

[quinfinn]

beautiful! wonderfully expressed with a choice of words that left me hungering for more. i think that this is my fave of yours to date. outstanding piece!

[Alicia Hirshey]

Dreams uphold great importance and you penned that well in this poem. It was great.

[Cynthia]

Absolutely love it, in love with it :) Its BEAUTIFUL! The whole picture you've painted, its breath-taking! I love your writing, they're all really beautiful!
The flow of the poem is great as well!
One of my favorite poems :)
Amazing!

[Kelly M.]

Really beautiful! I loved the end! It was soft and gentle, and, yes, somewhat sad. Great poem! :)

[Layla J Omorose]

I enjoyed reading this poem. It is very good and with a possible rewrite will be even better. The flow of the poem was good until the last three stanzas. They confused me a bit. For instance the wind is blowing to "revive the messages" what messages? If there was a line there that would explain or a word or two to explain what messages that would help with the confusion. Then in the next stanza when you say "A sad love story, and a tragic once beloved" maybe if you used the word tragedy instead of tragic the line would be stronger. Then the last line of the stanza when you say "but ends with knives that lock apart" I think I know what you are trying to say to the reader but the last line not only looks confusing but also reads that way. This confusion interrupts the flow of the poem and causes the reader to miss the overall meaning of the poem because they are trying to figure out what is being said in the line. A suggestion would be is to find away to reword the line or get rid of it all together and replace it with something else. With that being said the poem is very good and i enjoyed reading it. Like the other reviewers I loved the third stanza, it was beautifully written and the imagery was very good. And the last stanza is very good as well and ends the poem with the same strength that it started with.

[JustNeedToBeHappy]

The third stanza is beautiful :) So brokenly hopeful :)

[Seshat Nidaba]

Your power of visualization is really quite festive, I'm glad you don't write typical verse but something filled instead with surprises, spontaneity and vivid mystery and artistic arousal.

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I do like this a lot. I think that the artistic way of writing it is beautiful, (by that i mean the indentations) and i like the message to this. Good write