love duke

It happen random.. she was beautiful, no no she always is actually..  ‎ I just pen down.. her beauty or may be love.. ‎

love duke 

Seems happy, seems happy

 when I look at her

 Did she notice my presence,yeah my presence

 When I look at her

 Oo oo 

 Yeah, yeah she is pretty, pretty enough

 Did she look at me

 She Snatched my words, when I look at her

 Isn't,  isn't she pretty, so  do I look at her.

  Seems happy, do she seems happy

 Do she looks at me or, do I look at her 

 Stanza 2

 Eyes brown, when I look at her

  My silence end, yes she is pretty, pretty enough

 So, shall I speak or shall I wait

 Damn, she is pretty, pretty enough

 Stanza 3

 Words end, my silence creep 

 But wanna speak, wanna speak 

 Damn, she is pretty, pretty enough

 So shall I speak or shall she.

 Stanza 4 

 Noticed at, smiled pretty and I looked at her

 So shall I speak or  shall she

 God will u suggest this,

 will u speak,

 or tell something

 Continue

© 2016 sarik

Author's Note

May be you found it difficult to read or may be not. This is love actually, what i imagine looking at her,and tried to expressed it in words, the only thing I know. and finally thanks for the view.. critics accepted..

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Coyote Poetry

Very nice flow of thoughts. What was the ending to be? Easy to read. The words danced properly for the reader. Coyote Very nice flow of thoughts. What was the ending to be? Easy to read. The words danced properly for the reader. Coyote Rating /100 sarik 7 Years Ago Oow thanq Coyote.. End is nice actually :)

zaisham9393

Beautifully expressed,Thank you for sharing :)! Beautifully expressed,Thank you for sharing :)! Rating /100 sarik 8 Years Ago Okay, thanku for writing zaisham. This is special..

Bear

Critique: (Eyes blown, when I look at her) Eyes brown? (Damn, she is pretty pretty enough) pretty, pretty enough Review: The largest section in life's book is the one on relationships, you have added a new page to that section. A life lesson in love and romance, an inspiration to all who read this and learn from it, well done :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Critique: (Eyes blown, when I look at her) Eyes brown? (Damn, she is pretty pretty enough) pretty, pretty enough Review: The largest section in life's book is the one on relationships, you have added a new page to that section. A life lesson in love and romance, an inspiration to all who read this and learn from it, well done :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Rating /100 sarik 8 Years Ago Bear, this is very much appreciated madam, I have done the changes as suggested.. At the end, thanks again for writing..

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice flow of thoughts. What was the ending to be? Easy to read. The words danced properly for the reader.
Coyote

[sarik]

Oow thanq Coyote..
End is nice actually :)

[zaisham9393]

Beautifully expressed,Thank you for sharing :)!

[sarik]

Okay, thanku for writing zaisham. This is special..

[Bear]

Critique: (Eyes blown, when I look at her) Eyes brown?
(Damn, she is pretty pretty enough) pretty, pretty enough

Review: The largest section in life's book is the one on relationships, you have added a new page to that section. A life lesson in love and romance, an inspiration to all who read this and learn from it, well done :~) Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[sarik]

Bear, this is very much appreciated madam, I have done the changes as suggested..

At the end, thanks again for writing..