Secret (An untold love story)

continued an incomplete paragraph for Write India..

                  Secret (An untold love story)

 That day I met her for the first time. I was going out for a movie and  was late.

 

I don’t want to miss the movie, not for a single second so I started walking fast. I was thinking that may be I will reach their on time.

I was on my full speed,now  only five minutes left…I have to be there on time...so I boasted up my speed and  now I am walking more faster than before....no no…actually I was running.

and at that time I realize that I can also  become Ussain  Bolt, suddenly A girl come on my way I tried hard to stop but it didn’t work and the only thing I did is that I hit her...

 

I saw her for the first time, and I was doing the crime again and again...Looking at her without closing my eyes for a single second.I kept watching her,and the way she closed her eyes in fear , drooped things that she was carrying in a  surprising manner,  then screamed loudly in a silvery voice and this is how I become a victim of her.

 

I can also blame her sweet reaction which added fuel in making me a prisoner of her.

 

She did all this to stop me but I was on my full speed angel, how could I stop myself, even I tried hard to brake myself but everything goes in vain as I saw you. ”the most beautiful girl” on earth and lost my control which was natural.

I also never wished to let her to fall on to the ground in front of my eyesight so I kept my hand on her waist just to stop her from falling down on the ground then in a very slow manner she opened up her eyes it was of  dark grey  which sometime turns black that was the color of her iris . Maybe she also noticed mine or not I don’t know but I don’t want to miss that beautiful eyes and the smell of the flowers were not coming from somewhere else but it was she, smelling like a rose maybe she has taken a bath in a bathtub full of roses. Her hairs which surround her eyes make her look more and more pretty.  We both were looking continuously at each other eyes until her friends come for her rescue.

 I was lying down at the ground staring her, maybe I will get few more glimpse of her and yes I was right.She turned back to see me..

Yeah in  aggressive manner,then muttered something, and goes away..

 

And this was the first time when we meet …accidentally!!

And from that day I become a victim of her and for me it was like love at first accident.

after a long search operation finally I found her..

Our second meeting was on a flower shop..

I saw her once again in a flower shop ..she was picking the most beautiful one from the bunch..,although she was not less beautiful then the flowers itself.

I went their ...

she saw me and exclaimed  for few second then see saw me again angrily… her face become reddish and eyes  bigger..

same as of angry bird..

I smiled and her anger went high I can read all this from her face

I come closer to her she went back I come more closer  she goes back again

finally

She said

Are you planning to hit me  again..

that was an accident mam..

 actually .. in the theater n..I was in a hurry and we collide… I even waited their to say sorry but you until I say something

I saw you were gone..

Its okay..

I offered a bunch of  white rose to her...

what is this she said..

this is my way of saying sorry ..

she smiled..

Friends then..

No she said with a smile..then took my roses...and went away..

so where to meet again..I asked her in a louder voice..

she pointed her hand towards the sky...

for few moment I though may be she is a fairy..yeah she was beautiful..and so she lives in the paradise..and paradise is in sky so she pointed it upwards..

continue..

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Author's Note

Completed In a single night

waiting for mistakes....

Reviews

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

The flash back started all too suddenly and so much in depth that it quite fell apart from the whole piece. The first half, if I am not wrong, is the paragraph given in TOI writer's contest? That would explain the breech in plot.

The flash back part is good, but sounds like a roughly jotted down draft because of so many errors.
The story is beautiful, totally Bollywood kind beautiful and vibrant.
Keep working!

[sarik]

that what I was waiting for..many thanks for the suggestion...and thanks a lot for reviewing it..and yeah..this is the same one..I have mentioned it on discription also..from write India

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are welcome.

[FaeryQueen]

this was great, i suppose the only mistake was not extending it a bit

[sarik]

hahaa,

Thank you very much Khatoon,glad you liked...