Angry Rain

It was raining outside, nothing more I just tried to pen down...

Angry Rain

 

I went outside to see the sun shine

But stopped by the rain that fall outside

I stayed inside, waited to see the sun shine

But the angrily rain spoiling my joy

 

 I see little children playing outside

with the rain drop,  helped them enjoy

 

then come the thunderstorm with an unpleasant voice

and the little children  panicked and run inside

 

Their goes the rain and  again sun shine

As it welcome the children to come and enjoy

                    I walked and walked till I realize

                    The unpleasant thunderstorm voice

                    Finally  forced   the sun to shine…

         

To be continued

 

               

                         

                    

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author's Note

grammar mistake will be their as I wrote it...and without mistake not any of my work will be called complete..

Reviews

[Valentine]

That is one way to put it. Anger might move mountain in the right place. Valentine

[sarik]

I thought so Valentine :)

[emmajoy]

You paint a very beautiful picture here, creating little moments with a touch of magic. Heat, rain, thunder, wind, ice.. etcetera, all mean something different to people. Your poem shows how an adult and 'ittlies' discover both sides of what Nature delivers.. like it or not!

Angry rain! What a thought and of course, children can love extremes! Had an almight storm this morning.. really ANGRY RAIN it was! . :)

It would be sad to alter your phrasing - tis your voice; but, maybe work on the spelling of the language you're using. :)

[sarik]

Emmajoy, see I made it.. :)
#friends

[emmajoy]

In spite of saying I couldn't accept you on my Friends' list, had to come and read your work and discovered 'Angry Rain. It's such a beautiful and unusual theme.

[sarik]

Well, I am extremely delighted you viewed this madam..

[Coyote Poetry]

After the rain. The calm shall come. After the great storm. Earth turn safe again. I like the visions and thoughts create by the good description. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[sarik]

Coyote, this is your goodness sir..

I am glad you liked it..

[Coyote Poetry]

I did. A worthwhile read.

[rickm97]

Rain--
It makes green pastures for me to lay down in...
...its gentle shower washes away the grit of life...
...and the light will shine down upon me again and warm my spirit.

Well done, Sarik.

[sarik]

now I think I am done !!

very thanx Rick,you liked

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Nice attempt!
Rain is always an inspiration to fall and rise.

[sarik]

yup jyoti
and very thanx for viewing it...

[kyam]

Very cute! Entertaining too....Love it!

[sarik]

oo

so thanks Ms kyam that you liked

[kyam]

My Pleasure is all yours

[Shah Sabia]

You've tried your best to describe the scene, it is quite beautiful. But you need to work on the grammar, it'd be perfect then. Good luck with that.

[sarik]

very thanx sabia

will work on grammar also

[FaeryQueen]

great!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[sarik]

thanku khantoon