Logging Off (On My Mind)

Once it's on your phone

It's on your mind. 

"Fitness pals"

"Quitting smoking" apps

And the

New York Times.

Don't ask why

I don't remember

How they got there. Guess

It was just

Life on repeat

Playing that tune that 

Makes you tap your feet 

Roll down the windows and

Sing out. 

 

 

Once you're in my poem

You're on my mind. 

I wonder how it makes you feel.

I guess it depends on the 

Words I've sewn together to make

My fashion sentence

In the shape of art

With these little

Animated man-made

symbols we call

Words. 

 

I wonder if memories have 

Expiration dates

Like

Humans. 

Maybe you just run out of space

And start to shut down.

 

Logging off

Of this so called

Phenomenal World

 

Reviews

[Richard]

My god you're fantastic you're the best writer I've seen on here yet by a landslide too :)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

A very liberated post-modern academic assuming to be casual write!

[Michael G. Smith]

I'm on your mind? I guess you were on my because I seemed to be riding along your stream of thoughts and at the end I was still downloading your modern logic.

[saratogaparty]

haha there you go, now it's your turn to write a poem about it.

[h d e rushin]

your second stanza was so adventuresome and yet I saw it as as an affirmation ,
a solemn declaration of devotion to or emphasis on beauty and poetic
cultivation. Any and all things shaped by man, especially those symbolic things,
can be labled as art. But the artist (poet) has to first make that declaration.

your awsome.

hder

[saratogaparty]

You really have to be dedicated, or at least think that you mean it.

Thanks, as always :]

[Baby Ricochet]

Interesting piece. I liked the ending. Logging out of life and death. Cool write

[saratogaparty]

Thanks for reading!

[Trigorin]

This is really very nice, and you've expressed a feeling common to almost everyone, so it's definitely relatable and makes the reader want to keep reading. I feel like you could have taken the metaphor about humans in the third stanza a little farther, but that's up to you. Really well-done.

[saratogaparty]

You're right, it does kind of need some kind of explanation. Thanks for your time!