You Can't See

My response to years of my child being told lies. It does no good to lie to a child. Even children have eyes that can see the truth. This represents my feelings towards the poor soul that felt it necessary to lie to my child.

 

Downright dirty and DRUG ADDICTED!

Pain Inflicting, heart abusing W***E!

She's a total s**t,

I've seen her strut.....

I bet when they ask

She gives them more!

 

She's STRIPPING;

She's CONNIVING.

You know she's good at LYING.

And I know, it's so exciting;

the story is inviting

because my own life is a bore!

 

Doesn't matter 

what you have to say

about it.

Hope you're happy

thinking that way...

No doubt it

should lift you up

to step on me,

to pretend you know

what you can't see.

But I've got the truth;

and it's all around.

Your lies could never

hold me down.

 

Low and behold

I was once a stripper.

I took it off

for the highest tipper,

and I am not ashamed

of the road 

I am traveling.....

I made my own way

And quite a life

I am having!

 

Our mouths 

have never been hungry,

and material things

have been more than plenty.

We've traveled

and we've grown-

our experiences

reap what they have sewn!

So call me a drug addict

and I'll show you

my health and prosperity.

I live in a home

that I bought on my own

as a keystone of my stability.

And if I am a w***e, it's at my husband's request.

To satisfy his hunger for me, I always do my best.

 

Try as you may, 

you could never make 

a liar out of me;

I've never had the time

or the energy.

The liar lives in your mirror;

you are your own worst enemy.

Your illness is in control;

killing your life's reality.

 

Doesn't matter 

what you have to say

about it.

Hope you're happy

thinking that way...

No doubt it

should lift you up

to step on me,

to pretend you know

what you can't see.

But I've got the truth;

and it's all around.

Your lies could never

hold me down.

 

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Copyright 2007 Sarah Jane Edinger. All Rights Reserved.

Reviews

Wow! You make me glad that I looked under the new writers list! This is fantastic! I love the first part:
Downright dirty and DRUG ADDICTED!
Pain Inflicting, heart abusing W***E!
She's a total s**t,
I've seen her strut.....
I bet when they ask
She gives them more!

Because it's so hard hitting, and hten the rest of it is just totally undoing that really sewn in message. It shows somebody with a past that can be judged very stereotypically, but she is proving everyone wrong- girl power! And the way it says:
"And if I am a w***e, it's at my husband's request.
To satisfy his hunger for me, I always do my best."
I love that because it shows that not only does she have the husband, which seems unlikely for somebody of her nature, but also that she only does things for him- as any woman would!
The flow and structure throughout is very continuous and smooth, a really good write, feel free to send me some read requests on your work if you want a second opinion- I usually always get round to them- just sometimes takes a few days!:) Best Of Luck and Welcome to the Writerscafe. :) xx

There is alot of emotion in this write and I like it!! good write!!

[mysticgmekeepr]

This was good! Welcome to writers cafe.

[Clarisse Nanoit]

Thought this feels more like revenge than a piece that was intended to reveal truths about humanity, it does in some ways. I enjoyed reading this because of the rhythm and rhyme scheme. It wasn't exactly set in stone, but it was easy to follow. :) Good piece.
KH