The Little Ghost Girl

The little ghost girl,

She is my only friend.

I know somehow this isn't right, the reason being that she is dead.

She keeps me company though.

I never like it when she has to take her leave and go. 

We stay up all night just talking to each other.

Back and forth.

She disappears in a quick poof when there's a knock at the door.

I don't know why I'm the only one that can see her but I kind of like it this way.

No one else can come on by and steal her, shes forever my friend to be with and play.

She always tells me to look in the mirror though to see what I see.

Finally, I humor her and take a look.

Only to find that the dead girl is me.

Author's Note

Im sure I will add more onto this one in time

Reviews

[MandaBear]

Very interesting! You seem to be a nice girly ghost! I would be your friend =)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

This is indeed a bit creepy but it is nice. I like how at the end "the dead girl is me."

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you (:

[Anand Sehgal]

One of my American friends had a fictitious pal in her childhood !

[Sarah Lynn]

Creepy! But im sure it makes for great stories to tell people. Give them the heebie jeebies!

[Anand Sehgal]

:) :D Sure, I will

[Rita L. Sev]

Ooh! Deliciously creepy, Sarah! Nicely penned!

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you!(:

[David Burke]

That was amazing, I really like it!! :) great job kido

[Caradoc]

Creepy. So much so in fact this reminds me of a song titled, "Creepy Doll" by Jonathan Coulton.

This one is almost...innocent in the childlike actions of the narrator playing with their ghostly friend. The ending certainly was a twist and I wonder if it is a vision of the future? Or merely a delusion formed from a child's overactive imagination.

One thing I have to say is that you are clearly improving. This has a much better flow than your previous works. Spelling and grammar have been stepped up as well. However, I have to point out, a seeming mistake.

I assume this piece is titled, "The Little Ghost Girl". In your title, the word "the" is missing its "h".

Overall though I was pleasantly surprised by this one. Good job. Keep writing. You can only get better.

-Caradoc

[Sarah Lynn]

Ahh thank you so much!(: And yes ill be sure to fix that right now actually!

[Caradoc]

You are welcome.

[Laura Harrison]

I loved the twist at the end! Great write Sarah :)

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you (:

[genocide]

this is good i like this i didn't think you could do something like this it's good

[Sarah Lynn]

Well thank you .