Your Loss

Don''t fall for it every time ladies

Your words ? All lies 

Just like all of the other guys

You're all the same

I can hear your true self just by the way you say my name

Don't try to fool me, for I've been down this track

My trust ? You'll never have that back 

My love ? You'll never have 

For you're just like the rest of them 

I didn't fall for it this time though

This makes me so glad 

Watch me as i walk away, The girl you could of had.

Reviews

[Abeer until dawn]

"Don't try to fool me, for I've been down this track
My trust ? You'll never have that back.."

very aesthetically poetic, Beautiful Sara ... this would make a hit, if u consider it so :)

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you!(:

[Dominic Shaya]

I love the fire-spitting,it works here

[Dominic Shaya]

I love the fire-spitting,it works here

[tyson]

You sound like one very tough person, it's good to see someone getting angry about their feelings, too many people suffer from feeling sorry for themselves. There is a very strong, confident voice that breaks through this piece

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you so much !(:

[Rita L. Sev]

Heartbreak is hard to get over, but remember that they are not ALL the same. :) This is a good poetic venting, Sarah.

*In the last line, I think you mean "the girl you could have had."

[Sarah Lynn]

This is true they are not all the same ! The boyfriend i have now is amazing. And think you , ill be sure to change that !

[Jamie Cook]

Hell yeah! *flips bun cause my hair is in one* -.- Those types of guys are jerks, but meh oh well, weren't worth this piece of gold anyway! :D Awesome job :) You had flow which was stagnant but you got to it which was good :)

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you for the nice review love (:

[Jamie Cook]

WELCOME! :D

[Catherine Frain]

This is a wonderful poem that can show girls, exactly that they should do with a guy that is this way. To simple walk away.

Thought at first it was hard to read (Font is kinda small), I want though it and was pulled into the poem.

The only small mistake I see is in the last line: Watch me as i walk away, The girl you could of had."
the "i" should be capitalized, and instead of a capital letter after the comma, it should be lower cased.

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you ! And thank you for pointing out the error , ill be sure to fix that !

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

Powerful and indeed it speaks of truth. I like this, many can relate to it. Nice one.

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you (:

[Jordan]

it is a really good poem...

[Jeannear]

love this poem it speaks the truth

[Sarah Lynn]

Thank you!