Invisible?

I don't really know..

Walking through the hallways, feeling their stares.

They know I'm not okay, yet they don't bother to help me.

They just walk past, going about they're business.

Do they understand that if somebody had tried to help me;

Maybe I could have made it?

Maybe I wouldn't have lost hope.

I wish I knew what I do wrong.

Nobody talks to me.

Nobody wants to know me.

Maybe they're scared.

Maybe they know about me; and don't know what to say.

Do they know how I've been hurt?

Do they know I can't be around men.

Do they know I hate it when people touch me.

Do they know I lost my innocence at age 7?

Oh, how I wish somebody would smile at me.

Just so I know I'm not invisible.

It doesn't cost anything to smile.

A smile can save a life.

But what if your life is allready gone..

What if you wake up in the morning to realize your life is meaningless.

What if you wake up to find your invisible.

Author's Note

This was done quick, it's nothing special.

Reviews

[JudyC]

This poem has a good start, and good potential. You may want to find more specific words to describe your felings; for example, different words to express "invisible". You've touched on an experience that just about everyone shares from time to time, so this poem has great appeal. If you want to develop it more, I look forward to seeing it. Good work!

[Last Lying Look]

This was such a heart breaking piece yet so beautiful.
You did a wonderful job.
If you did this quickly I'd love to read a piece you spent a lot of time on!!
Great work!

-Elissa:)

[Autumn Reign]

so much emotion in such simple words.
so far, i love it.

[(:]

So far this poem is very nice.

[sarahkatherine]

This isn't done.
I'll get around to it.

[sarahkatherine]

Okay, thanks.

I suggest using stronger words to get your point across. Using the word 'gross' isn't exactly moving. It seems too simple, elementary even. Also, especially if you're writing a short poem, try not to repeat yourself. I see a really good poem in the making, so maybe you should make it longer?

[Delilah Dunn]

I like the theme of this poem. These are emotions that every teenager deals with at some point or another, and they are poignant indeed. I feel, however, that this piece seems unfinished. Delve deeper, perhaps, into the feelings introduced in this piece: loneliness, not fitting in, invisibility...why do you feel invisible? What makes you feel like people don't like you? Open up and give us a bit more imagery so that we can better understand what and why and where and how. Lots of potential here though...keep up the good work.