spit river

saliva stings my throat

infinate pain

death is my only resolution

goodbye my friends

it is better where

i can see my feet

in shallow water

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love short pieces with such imagery, and slight abstractness that lets us take our own journey with the poet...this does that...

really like the last three lines...second line did you mean "infinite"?

but yes, this is quite powerful...life sometimes gets us to where death seems the only resolution.

i relate to this...been there.

"in that shallow water" of hopelessness...

[SonOfPlunder]

Short, but precise. Lots of visuals in such a short piece

[Kamari's]

Looks like I'm the first here anyways you have very good structure and write with such great emotion and leave the writing itself simply but bursting with emotion inside the carefully chosen words great job.