Mine

All the stress that I see you go through; I want to take it all off your shoulders and off your mind. 

I would gladly take it and weigh myself down to see you once again fly. 

I would shackle myself to the problems that tend to find their way into your life. 

I want to see you soar and be free. 

Be the wondrous, joyful, ecstatic person I know you to be. 

The person that I know I will one day find to be mine. 

Mine for all of the rest of time. 

Reviews

[fiery-san]

Nicely done. But may I suggest you try dividing the paragraph to make it appear more like a poem because it has the tendency to make it look like a statement or declaration of love rather than a form of poetry. It's just a suggestion, if it is your own personal style on how to write your poems I have no right to tell you how you do it. Overall, the emotions were expressed pretty well.

[Sarah]

fiery-san: Easier read?
Sami Khalil: Thank you

[Sami Khalil]

I want to see you soar and be free .
A nice write.