Silent Swim

this was written sometime last year but i kind of forgot about it untill a little while ago. enjoy.

Its night.
and I'm in a backyard,
I am in a pool,
Swimming,
 And treading,
Swimming,
And treading,
Relaxed and content,
Everything is…
Silent.

I feel a hand,
On the back of my scalp,
Pushing me,
Down,
Into the murky waters

below
Shock! Confusion!
Everything is…
Silent.

I am thrashing,
Wildly,
Trying to get out of the suffocating waters,
That are keeping me...down,
In tune with gravity,
Panicked! Terrified!
Everything is…
Silent.

I am sure,
This is my last breath,
I scream,
Hoping against odds,
But only the bubbles that stream out of my mouth,
Can hear me,
Losing. Hopeless.
Everything is…
Silent.

Author's Note

all comments, reviews, and critisicms are welcome and appreciated! thank you!

Reviews

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I love the way you wrote 'Everything is�Silent' at the end of each stanza
I was imaging the scene as i was reading and it's very beautiful, the way you described it - how you see death in front of you
and the thought of being suffocated under water just freaks me out :o
Nice write!