this too shall pass

i'm barely holding on
to these delicate dreams
for they seem so unfulfilling
and they're untangling at the seams.

i clutch them tight together
but they're falling apart
my fingers are useless
as they press upon my heart.

my pulse is still breathing
[i'm barely alive]
and i can hardly force a smile
but it feels so natural to cry.

there's an emptiness inside me
pulling inside my chest
it comes upon me in waves
(leaving me no rest)

like everything else in this transient world
this too shall shiver and pass
until then, i think i will lay here
and run my fingers through the grass.

Reviews

[Luke Brooks]

Wow Kara this one was really good.
I was instantly drawn to it because I say the title alot.
Sometimes that's about all I know to say to people when they are going through something they don't know how to handle. (Sometimes its all I can tell myself).

"and i can hardly force a smile
but it feels so natural to cry."

Heartbreaking.
I know this feeling.

Wonderful job with this.
Very good write.

[Cdnsurfer]

Very sad, melancholy piece. Yes, sometimes we sit and wonder -- what it's all for? What's the point? Yet, it is also in these "still" times that comes a clarity, purcolating up that gives power to words. Without night there cannot be day, and so with great sadness there will always be great laughter. Thank you for sharing, Kara. Cheers! Rob

[Drew Scot]

Poetry and rythm unlike Kara, but heart exactly like Kara.

Beautiful depth. Beautiful conclusion.

TruPeace
d.s.

[Being.john.sweet~The Ev..]

mmm,,,,love the ending...the invocation of nature here brings it full circle to me, thank you~John

[Sarah Williams]

like everything else in this transient world
this too shall shiver, and pass
until then, i think i will lay here
and run my fingers through the grass.

--I love this stanza! May I suggest that in the second line you move the comma, "this too shall shiver and pass,"...it just seems to read a little smoother that way. Back the stanza...I LOVED the sound of it...the idea of allowing something to "pass" while laying on a bed of grass.

Overall...I think this was a nice piece. The first and last stanzas are the strongest, I think, as they had the best rhymes...towards the middle, some of them seemed a little more forced than others. Still, the idea behind this is both simple and brilliant at the same time. You have such a wonderful way of showing us the depths of your heart! Bravo!