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As always, you manage to zero in on the essential aspects of a moment, elucidating them for me in such a way that makes me feel as though I "know" that moment.
"no, don't close your eyes...
please, look into mine."
This was quite an effective line, both in content and timing. I can understand the instinct to close one's eyes to heighten the sense of the moment. But to look into another's eyes instead (especially being asked to do so), adds a level of intimacy and intensity that amplifies the perception of the moment even more. Those lines perfectly set the tone for the rest of the piece.
such carefree sensual thoughts...like the rest of the world doesnt matter...if only for a few hours, minutes, seconds...its all about the two of you...and such imagery as above makes it really come alive...memories and sunlight are a surefire combination...
This had a easy sensual feel to it, as if you have not other cares in thow worl other then this person. I really enjoyed this piece. this was far more simpler in writing then your other poems, but nonetheless still very good. THAT is what gave this a care free feel. I liked this one very much. Good work Kara.-Catrina
I'm so glad that you're back, I've missed your writing. This is an excellent "comeback" poem, so soft and so soothing. There was a sense of peace in this poem that hasn't been present in your writing for quite some time, I'm glad that it's back (though I love your other work too). Bravo, my friend!!!
"I know the angles of your body as only a lover would" This is my favorite part. It is so intimate and revealing. It shows a respect for your mate as a whole physical form rather than just a few nice features. Welcome back K.
this was a cute one. definitely on the shorter side compared to what you usually write. i don't like the word "dewy" because it sounds too sappy to me, but that's just my personal opinion.
nice to hear from you again. the vivid honesty of your poetry never dissapoints me, sounds like you had quite an adventure for yourself in the warm sun. i look foreward to more poems like this.
"lay beside me
on this dewy evening grass
and dream with me.
no, don't close your eyes...
please, look into mine."
I could dream in your eyes all day, my love. Aruba has created it's own feeling in all of your writing so far. The feeling of desire, longing, and love runs through them effortlessly. :) Happy to have read this.
I am resolved to never be content with the lives of "quiet desperation" which so many of us lead, to continuously challenge myself, and forever walk in Beauty.
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