life [in all its shapes and forms]

Versenator's Challenge # 18 : LIFE in all its shapes and forms.

life
in the shape
of waves upon the shore;
the curves of the water
on the sand.

life
in the form
of dew upon the leaves;
and the delicate strength
of your hands.

life
in the shape
of morning glory vines;
the clarity of a soft
autumn breeze.

life
in the form
of moss upon the earth;
the breathing of sky
upon seas.

life
in the shape
of secret smiles in the night;
the windswept moments
of our lives.

life
in the form
of an early morning mist;
and happiness as it
softly arrives.

Reviews

[I.R.]

I love the different snapshots you give us of life. The only thing I suggest is that you could pair up the images of nature with abstract statements, such as in the stanza where you juxtapose the dew on a leaf and the strenght of a hand. That really creates contrast. But that's just a suggestion. I love the anaphora of life. Great work.

[David P. Eckert]

Lovely, so many living things, a living world around us, to be thankful for.
The images were gentle and clear

life in the form
of moss upon the earth;
the breathing of sky
upon seas.

And I enjoyed the leisurely meter and simple rhyme pattern. Very well done.

[Luke Brooks]

Truely beautiful.

life
in the form
of moss upon the earth;
the breathing of sky
upon seas.

What a breath of fresh air.
Thanks you.
The imagery was honestly gorgeous.

[Nihad Dweidary]

Karacedes! You surely are a wonderful writer, my dear. You can say anything and it would come out rather wondrous. You control the rhyme so well here. I enjoyed the musical feel to this poem combined with all the touching parturitions of life's forms.

life
in the form
of moss upon the earth;
the breathing of sky
upon seas.

Have you any idea how much I love this image? The breathing of sky upon seas is so original, karabenz. I simply can't say enough about it. I think this will stick with me till the end of the day. As usual, a home run for you. Bang, and the ball flies to the the stands!

Love, -Nihad