life [in all its shapes and forms]

Versenator's Challenge # 18 : LIFE in all its shapes and forms.

life
in the shape
of waves upon the shore;
the curves of the water
on the sand.

life
in the form
of dew upon the leaves;
and the delicate strength
of your hands.

life
in the shape
of morning glory vines;
the clarity of a soft
autumn breeze.

life
in the form
of moss upon the earth;
the breathing of sky
upon seas.

life
in the shape
of secret smiles in the night;
the windswept moments
of our lives.

life
in the form
of an early morning mist;
and happiness as it
softly arrives.

Reviews

[I.R.]

I love the different snapshots you give us of life. The only thing I suggest is that you could pair up the images of nature with abstract statements, such as in the stanza where you juxtapose the dew on a leaf and the strenght of a hand. That really creates contrast. But that's just a suggestion. I love the anaphora of life. Great work.

[~crazy Beautiful~]

the last lines were my favorite, i could feel the sensation of the morning dew on my skin, love it

[Katie B]

Simple yet powerful. You created a bunch of wonderful images of nature and life. It flowed well and was very eloquent. This is a great poem!

[Maria G.]

Beautiful kara just as your vision of the world..

[Deannie Golden]

this was beautifully done ...making anyone who reads it understand the beauty of the earth and life itself in many different ways... keep up the great work

[Paul Grimsley]

depth in apparent simplicity is not an easy thing to achieve. to make it appear so effortless, to craft such a fluid line through a poem and take us seamlessly from one image and thought to the next like a maestro conducting an orchestra, that is truly an achievement. and a beautiful one.

[Girl, Interrupted]

i DID enjoy this. not one of your stronger poems, but it was still a calming read. =)

-adriana

[Dylan Cook]

It's a beatiful poem. I love the images you bring up. Keep up the good work! Is each stanza in haiku form?

In Love Peace and Merriment
Dylan

[Sadie]

i adore the imagery in this poem, it makes me feel calm and peaceful...the days troubles slowly lifted away for moments when i read it. :)

[Inmate 72866]

This is a pretty poem, but I'm not sure it really pops. Pretty nature imagery is nice, but it can also be deadning. If you say what a thousand have already said in the same way, how can you grow. Nature is all the things you said, but it is also some other things that we may never discover until the words are uncovered. I would say that you could be a little more adventurous. Maybe those words are in your vocabulary alone. I hope this isn't too harsh. I write to help. Believe me, I criticize myself for the same things. Keep writing.The poem is very pretty.

[Bluehealer]

life
in the shape
of secret smiles in the night;
the windswept moments
of our lives.

This is a poem all in itself... great job, K.

B