sunshine through the blinds

the sunshine has imbedded horizontal lines
against her skin;
violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world.

she parts the blinds
with two delicate fingers
to glance outside.

pupils dilate
to soak it all in.

from the sigh of the
weeping willow
to the gentle curve
of the street

eyelids flutter fast
then tighten quick

sunspots bounce against the
backdrop of her heart.

her fingers return to fall at her side.
 

she finds comfort in the darkness
of her house
of this room
of her mind
 

of the distance she places between herself
and the
sunshine.

 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

the sunshine has imbedded horizontal lines
against her skin;
violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world.

Wow what a gripping start to another fabulous piece... I like the use of the blind as the emotional wall being put up to keep the hurt out... sometimes our reaction is to just give in on feeling anything but we as humans if we aren't feeling then there is no reason to be alive so eventually we must open the blind and trust the sun to show us the light. I certainly do understand where those feelings come from though... and your writing again is well beyond me praise but I will say it, spectacular.

[T. Thorn]

Excellent. A perfect poetic description of an emotional and circumstantial state I find myself in quite often (reclusion in the darkness of my room, especially when the light is trying so desperately to pierce in).

I love the use of the words "violating" and "distance." You illustrate well how she feels about the light-- contempt and isolation mixed with curiosity (looking out the window anyway).

Love it.

[Wendy G.]

hey this was beautiful . . . really. it's Plathlike depression, in sweeter form.

sunspots bounce against the
backdrop of her heart.

sweet.

[Roger F Aucoin]

Very nicely done, Kara.

[Antony]

Kara, to me this is so beautifully spoken. I beleive you actually went to your window to gather inspiration for these words. The images are that good.

[The Guerrilla Warhol]

"violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world."

these lines are amazing. i think that you have something rather beautiful started here. it's a vivid image; may as well have painted it. actually, i can picture the painting in my head. so i might have to paint it. i wont, but itd be a good painting.

the first stanza is by far my favorite. i think it would make a great poem alone. one thing i would change, the word "against." to embed (or imbed, since you went that route) is to put something into something else. to surround it. i didnt like the word embed there at first, and the i figured out why:

"the sunshine has imbedded horizontal lines
into her skin;"

try that. otherwise, you nailed it.

[Lisa]

breathtaking - I really imagined the moment. Beautiful!

[Trisha Clark]

"violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world."

This line absolutely does it for me Kara. You deserve all of the credit you've been getting.

[I Speak Begonias.]

Beautiful! Most definitely a wonderful working of words.

[Richard K]

This poem definitely put me into the moment. I especially loved the first stanza.
'violating the distance she has placed between
herself
and the world.'
Beautiful.

[Zachary Dolan]

this is lovely.
I can totally empathize with the "placing distances" theme.

safety in solitude.