layers

you peel away
the layers
of pain
in my heart.

slowly
with the delicacy
of flower-petal
prayers.

i am shocked into
submission
by the fact that
someone cares.

the stamen of
my starry-eyes
cradles the scent
of something new.

i scurried swift into
the earth
but blossom slowly
just for you.

i unfold
to the sunshine
and offer
nectar sweet

how can I wither
when I'm folded deep
within
your heat.

i sleep now
with the soft, sweet
delirium of
dreams.

to the promise
of my petals
and silky earthen
streams.

the fading fragrance
of my soul
has begun to shiver
and expand.

suddenly I feel
capable
of the strength
which life demands.

yes…

you peel away
these layers
in my heart.
 

Reviews

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Where do I begin again... damn Kara once again your words leave me trying ti find the right ones worthy of praise for you work... this speaks so gently of how love can heal those emotional scars of the past like neosporen... I've read many thing on the subject and written them myself but the way you phrase it is divine...

i scurried swift into
the earth
but blossom slowly
just for you.

like this stanza what a way to say you are coming out of your protected state to take a chance on something you know is real. I could go on and on... the beauty in your words are like that of a red rose blooming.

[I.R.]

Nice piece. Good rythm and sound devices. I like when poets use sound devices like alliteration; it almost makes rhyming obselete, almost lol. The only thing that bothered me as the word pain in the beggining. In my poetry workshops, my prof drove the habit in me of not using abstracts in the beggining of the poem. It is much better when the abstract is conveyed through an image, at least that's my opinoin, which you could certainly ignore. Over all, great flow and rhtym. Great piece :]

[La'misspixie]

Whoa. This is truly beautiful. I could feel your soul being lifted just by reading that... I love it (:

[Sarah D. F. Wall]

Breathtakingly beautiful. I loved the flower imagery in relation to 'yourself'. It flowed very, very well. Thanks for writing something so beautiful. =D

[Edward Beaman]

This is beautiful. It comes alive even more when read aloud. Nice reading voice.

[Luke Alexander]

"You peel away the layers of pain in my heart." I could read this hundreds of times without dimishing its meaning. Emphasis is on every word, slowly revealing implied subject. And as each word is read, an inaudible voice is heard. A voice of an author.

[T. L. O'Neal]

I love the way you make a comparison of your feelings with a flower. Well written and brings forth a lovely visual image.

[Richard K]

To be on the receiving end of this poem. It would make any lucky man putty in your hands. How is it that your words always feel so true? Yet, without truly knowing you, each person feels exactly what you put into every piece you write.

I'll always adore your writing.

[Gordon Greene]

Could you please do a book of poetry?
This is wonderful.
g.g.

[Anhedonia 1349]

Phenomenal. No better now than it was before, but I think the flow's exquisite.

I'm always glad to help.

[Nihad Dweidary]

i scurried swift into
the earth
but blossomed slowly
just for you.

Delicate, boundless, and sensual. My God, what else? I am just smitten with the soft feeling this left in me when I read it. It filled my head to the brim, and now look at me reel under the effect of the impact.

Love, -Nihad